Re: Tryst by <~>	27-Aug-02/8:27 PM
Creative use of the Limerick form. Some may say they were caught in a current and carried, but, reflecting on't, might later admit to plying those waters with all sails out.
Re: Suicide III by disturbedone182	27-Aug-02/8:34 PM
I'm with Anagram; hang in there, D.O. Tomorrow you may meet someone who'll help you to see clear to a different perspective on your life a then we'll all be rating your odes to a butterfly, or some such.
Re: denied by <~>	27-Aug-02/8:39 PM
Refreshingly heartfelt for this site. Narudasian? Does remind me of Pablo. Another poem that could work as a song; Shawn Colvin could do it well.
Re: Sacrosanct Oligarch by Frass	27-Aug-02/9:53 PM
Yes
Re: The green mile by Ming T. Merciless	29-Aug-02/3:29 PM
Have mercy on us, Ming. Methinks thine titles exceed thine poemes in interestingnecessity.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/3:32 PM
Keybored is mine, PAKI; there were never any profundities.
Re: Wildcatting The Canard: by horus8	29-Aug-02/3:37 PM
Once again, H8 missed the memo regarding quality and quantity. Rein yourself in, chisel, hone, and shake some spears into your lines.
Re: Tunnel Vision by x311	31-Aug-02/7:14 PM
Your voice has created an insistent presence on this site with this poem, x311. The poem makes me wonder about the past of the protagonist/antagonist. I could see this as a lead in, in italics, to a short story that starts...18 months ago....in a little cafe in Santa Fe....
Re: Here by anagram	31-Aug-02/7:32 PM
I like this, A. I think it very colourfully paints a vibrant feeling and place; it does not lead me into beigeness and empty niceties. The crazy crown is scary, and who is Dicky bow, anyhow? What sport were your referring to with the score, there. Rugby?
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Sep-02/5:08 PM
Moving, depressing, thought provoking. Plath-like. No angel, no hero, only bitter memories.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Sep-02/5:15 PM
Like with Zzin, tell me you're not just reeling off all these new and excellent poems, GW! I'm gonna read them all, again. 'When you bewildering me like sudden rain came'; could a comma help in there, somewhere? (I'm just grasping at straws to hopefully helpfully critique something).
Re: One Size Fits Most by Lenore	1-Sep-02/5:18 PM
Let's not forget Big Matriarchy. I like this poem, particularly for the environmental and socio-political awareness it engenders.
Re: Father O Father O Father of Fools by dougsoderstrom	1-Sep-02/8:13 PM
I like what you're after here, DS. I think you could say it better. Consider shortening the poem, not locking into metre, then losing it. Stay with a freeform which allows you to creatively toss in the off-metre phrase and make it ring like bells.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Sep-02/8:19 PM
Very good. Reminiscent of Anais Nin. However, I think the first line is the weakest. My hands would be mute; no 's'. Comma or line break after 'speak'.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Sep-02/8:26 PM
I see it differently; Bab not thinking too highly of women. He's simply telling a story, very well, from the perspective of men, together. We think this way; the poem communicates very effectively to me.
Re: Hypocrites by PawnedTidal	1-Sep-02/8:31 PM
Who are these savage, hypocrital betrayers? My interest is peaked; tell me.
Re: Z higher of arts by ==Doylum	2-Sep-02/8:18 PM
Thanks for the reference, Dylm, I'll share this sextuplet limerick with my grandchildren. Although sifting through your emissions on this site to find something mildly diverting is akin to groping around at midnight in a shit bog, I do like the first two lines of the fourth limerick which end with beauty and cutie.
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Sep-02/11:05 AM
Ach du lieber, was kann ich sagen? Ein schones dichter und gedicht, aber keine anderer wurd auf Deutsch schreiben; schade....schadenfreude.
Re: The Seasons, Changes by Frass	5-Sep-02/8:38 PM
You must be a Brit, Dylm/DA, like Anagram says. Is wittering like 'whinging about'? Avon is the easternmost and far flungest away from civilization outpost of sandy, sealsalty natural beauty on the simply s'wonderful Outer Banks of North Carolina. Although I won't be driving that far, I am spending the weekend in Virginia Beach, where I'll be riding the new (to me) '01 Gary Fisher Joshua F4 I just nabbed for a song this afternoon.
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Sep-02/9:05 PM
Yes, Nntwnd, you have. The line about the tear is the best; otherwise, I'm still waiting for Dunkeles Engel to submit something with meaningful line breaks