poemranker ::Wildcatting The Canard: by horus8

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Free verse № 11845

Wildcatting The Canard:

Member since 2002 · Posted 28 Aug 2002 · Edited 23 May 2003 · 8 comments

Fear, has banded together all of my senses. Love, has been swept under the dog's rug. Hate, is stoking my wood burning stove. Lust, is the corrupter in all of my choices. Greed, is the factor behind all of my goals. Faith, is a harlot that I sleep with too often. Revenge, a trunk toting cousin staying for the weekend. Tomorrow, is a time that I choose not to remember. Yesterday, her pond reflection under my skipping stone. Family, is a picture held not by a squared frame. Possessions are labeled and boxed into storage. Alone, in this cabin with one bowl of porridge. Denial, the way that I dance to forget spin, but nothing was really that funny, now was it? Overpriced, I can’t catch up...<Easter> Trailing behind this marathon of madness...<Christmas> Organization, my only asset...<Fourth of July> Reflected fraying sanity...<Birthday> Fine spun, I must seem seem-less...<Halloween> Look again at this chasm crawl...<Memorial Day> I know this crater all too well...<Labor Day> How when wet, her sides do swell...<Palm Sunday> I felt her facets, and fissures within...<Thanksgiving> I named this pit Faith to forget why I made her...<Alzheimer's disease> <Next matins> <Diaphanous> {Big wheel-ride down Mt. Baldy} An azure cross bear/ing the face of Jesus. Riding on a scorp/ions tail. Top/ped with layers as if a cake. Prison is she/lter when shelter is free/dom. The artist creates the look. How free/dom is wicked to police with cop/per badges. Supreme work in folds divine impairs my out/look on world dec/line. Molten wet pennies from hea/ven. Stinging dry no moisture soothes. Pud/dles of spare change forms help/less for thieves. The paint has clogged my pores. I'm wait/ing in brick/clad buildings with concrete dry sleeves. I rub the wash/ing tubes. The stairway to plea/sure is not what it se/ems. Back and forth with my hands, but the filth acquired in days spe/nt staring has scrat/ched my orbs. Now I can't lo/ok while stuck in windows of glass shattered blame. Bli/nd, lost to problems, and clo/sed secure. Until the thin/ner has cleared the outcome. Lo/nely, way to quiet for yo/ur own good. Co/unt the dust in my wrinkles. Sketching pen wo/rks not for me. No one to blame which/road was traveled when/you/went insane. Dealing in slaves when money’s/the game. Face it, or just shut the fuck up proper. No more green men! On rooftops. Lately brown spots. On Spring grass! Is killing the Spring scene. One last ride on my Green Machine. Then I'll come inside. For real this time Grandma, I promise.

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8 comments

[5] Lenore 28-Aug-02/3:13 PM Reply
Screw Faith!
[10] Sigh'ense... 28-Aug-02/9:39 PM Reply
Oh shiznit! I love this in ways i shouldnt... Da1 has been subconscously contradicted to my satisfying surprise. Keep it raw and nasty-saucy! One
[9] Katie 29-Aug-02/5:54 AM Reply
I love your poem!!! goodluck =)
<3 katie
[7] Christof 29-Aug-02/8:33 AM Reply
This always seems to happen...I really like the first two stanzas of this, I like the structure that reverses itself and some of your descriptions (desecrations?) are spot on - Family, for instance, and Alzheimer's. It's powerful stuff. But then it just seems to go mad and I lose interest. Sorry.
[5] Lenore 29-Aug-02/10:33 AM Reply
Look, all I was saying is if you can't keep her, screw her. That's what I did. Love the changes.
[2] Frass 29-Aug-02/3:37 PM Reply
Once again, H8 missed the memo regarding quality and quantity. Rein yourself in, chisel, hone, and shake some spears into your lines.
[7] Christof 30-Aug-02/2:36 AM Reply
I think i can see what you're getting at Mr Horus - this big wheel ride down Mt Baldy past L Cohen I can see - but I don't see how all these bits fit together as one poem. I think a lot of your poems are part of the same patchwork of thoughts and crazinesses that run through your head and for that reason are all of a piece and wildly variant at the same time. You do mad things to my mind, my friend. I think I'm getting close to what you're on about and then it veers off at the last minute. Burp.
[n/a] dougsoderstrom 23-May-03/1:25 PM Reply
Read Soderstrom's new poem (Theology)----it's great!