Alright; you've got relevant ideas, perspective. However, considering some of the things I've read on this site, I sincerely hope they don't come alive 'away into the words and deeds of others.' Submit more, Lenore.

...Jesu, that's who. Keep trying YW.

Moving a few commas might make it erotic, I think. Hone that ambition, wannabe.

I give you phlegm hockers shite on this site; but, this I like. It falls loosely into the category of social commentary.

...or, that could be in the shape of the Philippines.

I could see this put to music; somehow reminds me of 'This Flight Tonight' (Joni, Nazareth).

Dang me, I'm just a foundering foole for this sort of poetry. If you just reeled this one off, Zzin, I'm gonna scream in jealous enviousity. Methinks you read...like, alot. Your capitalizing makes me wonder if you've hidden one more layer of riddle, or something.

Dylm, I don't like your bilious tripe, nor that of DA, H8, or any of the other roach spray sniffers on this site. Shove off and good riddance to yas.

GW, you're making an impact on this site. Your contributions to date elevate the debate; although, they do lean strongly towards strafing those of my gender role. Very personal and powerful. Your poetry, now, requires a mirrored response from a male poet on the subject of wicked wymyn.

You have some interesting ideas, try pruning this by about a fourth and honing the syllables and catch a few internal rhymes. Might make your perspective that much clearer.

My, are you getting all persnickety lately, Zzin. Let's give those new to wordsmithery a chance to separate wheat from chaff. DDW, edit and prune your writing a little more, then submit it.

Oh, so now you two like each other? Zzin + His spouse; mucho mojo a la femme. But, in this piece, where is Freya? I could see extending this to cover a larger number of female deities.

Now just hold on one cottenpicken minute there, Zzin. I think the poet is trying to express something more urgent and real than plenty of other alternatingly pretentious and/or scatalogical rambling rantings clogging this site, and is just having difficulty expressing her ideas well in words. Have you considered, given her country, what her native language might be? Write us all a concrete poeme in the shape of the Phillipines, and do so in Tagalog.

Christof, you're gonna have to get in line with the rest of us who've had our fancies tickled by Zzin's wordsmithery. Other than the rare typo, how can I possibly criticize her poetry? I leave that to babbit11 and others at that level (methinks the two of them are really well known poets who are just teasing the rest of us on this site).

Thanks, PAKI. Cycle of existence deal. Your mission, you mangy whelp, should you choose to accept it; read 'Poem in October' by Dylan Thomas, out loud.

I'd prefer -=No Angel=-. Submit something worth a damn and stop indulging your self-imagined refulgence. Have you tried Galoise cigarettes? They're delicious; have 5 packs, today.

Hot damn, Dave, socio-political commentary crackling like a Taser. Edit a little more before posting. 'Wild dancing shadows' is strong; 'carefully packaged...' is confusing. The last lines are memorable.

Very refreshing to read your sincere and biting comments on the writer's art and lot. Read 'In my craft or sullen art' by Dylan Thomas. I am also a Doug, I just hide behind the German word for lichen.

Alright, 11am in VA, I'm up and doing what??? Refinishing my '59 Melody Maker, like I should? No, I'm logging back in to this damnable site. Thanks, Bachus, for a comment unusual for you, cogent, referential, intelligible; as a musician, do you know Every Body Gets Drunk At Elections? PAKI, I finally read some of your poetry; I like it much better than many of your wretchedly shallow comments. Frankly, I'd love to read more from Anagram; dude, I'm scots-american, I WILL visit the old country, it's gonna happen.

Hang on, there, Stbr and Mphst, I'm nice, too. Just ask PAKI. The poem could use some tweaking.