regarding some deleted poem...	24-Mar-03/1:31 PM
You're on to something, you've got creative ideas here, Lnshdw. If the title of the poem is Hope, Savior, Sinner, keep order of stanzas the same, or the exact reverse (instead of Sav., Sin., Hope). Try revising it at 3pm.
Re: Atlanta to Albany by powerline	24-Mar-03/1:40 PM
SHEESH, finally, a real poem I can enjoy. Since I may be traveling to Albany (alBENNee, where my sister was born) via Atlanta, soon, this poem got my attention. Good for you, Pwrln, we need more of your sort on this site. I edit writing for a living, I'll help you out...it's 'reference'.
Re: Pathetic by openwounds	24-Mar-03/1:50 PM
Very honest writing, Pnwnds. Yes, you'll never be good enough for them, and you'll never BE them. Maybe that's a good thing.
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Mar-03/10:59 AM
What a delicately lovely effort, FA, particularly when contrasted with your 'about' user entry. I'd prefer 'To fly towards moon and the stars' since the former is closer to us.
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Mar-03/10:59 AM
What a delicately lovely effort, FA, particularly when contrasted with your 'about' user entry. I'd prefer 'To fly towards moon and the stars' since the former is closer to us.
Re: The Battle by Birdman42s	26-Mar-03/10:38 AM
I thought this would be about Iraq, Brdmn. If the battle is within, what's it over...alcoholism, violent urges, etc., or just the general evil potential within humans? And thanks, Nwb5, for your very cogent comments.
Re: Awe, I'm like so shocked by horus8	26-Mar-03/10:48 AM
I disagree, Cdcs. Somewhere between the rambling 'Oxywarmonger,' by PAKI, and this oblique haiku is the right length and quality of poem to sum up the war in Iraq. Who on this site is up to writing it? Methinks Zzin or DA.
Re: you will feel by nentwined	28-Mar-03/2:05 PM
'as every...' is a strong line, Nntwnd. I think there's more to this poem in your head; I'd like to read it.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Mar-03/4:27 PM
Very strong, G'sW. Earlier last week the Brits had a count of 20 dead in Iraq; 18 by accidents or friendly fire.
Re: Glare of Dawn by OneFingerAnswer	29-Mar-03/4:31 PM
Excellent, OFA; especially 'Staring down the future'. The appropriate strewing of a smattering of commas will help your meaning.
Re: Conditional Sex by scitz	29-Mar-03/4:35 PM
Damn good, Sctz. As a recently divorced person, I sure as shite don't want to go through this.
Re: fever by <~>	31-Mar-03/2:02 PM
A myriad of pheromones abound, Zzin. After this past winter, many await the sun. Hmm, if only you'd worked 'sprang' in there, somehow.
Re: Wanna Be Porn Star. by spank me baby yeah	1-Apr-03/1:58 PM
The movie 'Porn Star,' the story of a certain hedgehog, is now in a theater near you, SMBY.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Apr-03/8:09 AM
Very strong, Cdcs.
Re: F**K The World by loneshadow29	2-Apr-03/1:39 PM
LS, aren't you the guy in Richmond? Something in the water down there? Love the world, I say, every pluperferct participle of it. But, you make a strong case here, almost changed my mind.
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Apr-03/8:35 AM
Reminds me of 'Lament' by Dylan Thomas, Sttl; check it out.
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Apr-03/8:41 AM
One of the best haikus I've read on this site, or anywhere, Zzin.
Re: la vieja loca con los gatos by <~>	7-Apr-03/8:45 AM
Nicely done, Zzin; I could see this as a cat rap. Friends of mine clean carpets and had to work at a townhouse where the woman had over 100 cats and the whole place was layered in dreck like you wouldn't believe.
Re: Damaged By 'Weakness' by Mr Pig	11-Apr-03/12:30 PM
Great concept and very good poem (9); but, present yourself in the best light and spell it right, MP.
Re: Oil Spill by scitz	12-Jun-03/1:15 PM
Very good, Sctz; more environmental poems, I say.