on some deleted poem
2 Apr 2003, 8:09 AM
Very strong, Cdcs.
on some deleted poem
7 Apr 2003, 8:41 AM
One of the best haikus I've read on this site, or anywhere, Zzin.
on la vieja loca con los gatos by <~>
7 Apr 2003, 8:45 AM
Nicely done, Zzin; I could see this as a cat rap. Friends of mine clean carpets and had to work at a townhouse where the woman had over 100 cats and the whole place was layered in dreck like you wouldn't believe.
on F**K The World by loneshadow29
2 Apr 2003, 1:39 PM
LS, aren't you the guy in Richmond? Something in the water down there? Love the world, I say, every pluperferct participle of it. But, you make a strong case here, almost changed my mind.
on Wanna Be Porn Star. by spank me baby yeah
1 Apr 2003, 1:58 PM
The movie 'Porn Star,' the story of a certain hedgehog, is now in a theater near you, SMBY.
on you will feel by nentwined
28 Mar 2003, 2:05 PM
'as every...' is a strong line, Nntwnd. I think there's more to this poem in your head; I'd like to read it.
on some deleted poem
29 Mar 2003, 4:27 PM
Very strong, G'sW. Earlier last week the Brits had a count of 20 dead in Iraq; 18 by accidents or friendly fire.
on Glare of Dawn by OneFingerAnswer
29 Mar 2003, 4:31 PM
Excellent, OFA; especially 'Staring down the future'. The appropriate strewing of a smattering of commas will help your meaning.
on Conditional Sex by scitz
29 Mar 2003, 4:35 PM
Damn good, Sctz. As a recently divorced person, I sure as shite don't want to go through this.
on Awe, I'm like so shocked by horus8
26 Mar 2003, 10:48 AM
I disagree, Cdcs. Somewhere between the rambling 'Oxywarmonger,' by PAKI, and this oblique haiku is the right length and quality of poem to sum up the war in Iraq. Who on this site is up to writing it? Methinks Zzin or DA.
on The Battle by Birdman42s
26 Mar 2003, 10:38 AM
I thought this would be about Iraq, Brdmn. If the battle is within, what's it over...alcoholism, violent urges, etc., or just the general evil potential within humans? And thanks, Nwb5, for your very cogent comments.
on some deleted poem
25 Mar 2003, 10:59 AM
What a delicately lovely effort, FA, particularly when contrasted with your 'about' user entry. I'd prefer 'To fly towards moon and the stars' since the former is closer to us.
on some deleted poem
25 Mar 2003, 10:59 AM
What a delicately lovely effort, FA, particularly when contrasted with your 'about' user entry. I'd prefer 'To fly towards moon and the stars' since the former is closer to us.
on some deleted poem
24 Mar 2003, 1:31 PM
You're on to something, you've got creative ideas here, Lnshdw. If the title of the poem is Hope, Savior, Sinner, keep order of stanzas the same, or the exact reverse (instead of Sav., Sin., Hope). Try revising it at 3pm.
on Atlanta to Albany by powerline
24 Mar 2003, 1:40 PM
SHEESH, finally, a real poem I can enjoy. Since I may be traveling to Albany (alBENNee, where my sister was born) via Atlanta, soon, this poem got my attention. Good for you, Pwrln, we need more of your sort on this site. I edit writing for a living, I'll help you out...it's 'reference'.
on Pathetic by openwounds
24 Mar 2003, 1:50 PM
Very honest writing, Pnwnds. Yes, you'll never be good enough for them, and you'll never BE them. Maybe that's a good thing.
on Damaged By 'Weakness' by Mr Pig
11 Apr 2003, 12:30 PM
Great concept and very good poem (9); but, present yourself in the best light and spell it right, MP.
on some deleted poem
7 Apr 2003, 8:35 AM
Reminds me of 'Lament' by Dylan Thomas, Sttl; check it out.