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la vieja loca con los gatos (Free verse) by <~>
Huss had a taste for vole spleen and Tibb for starling head but Ted would bring her robins, live, and wait for her in bed. El Blanco would howl and pace with his good ear cocked to the sky; The Slimp, she'd sneak away, like Tempest did when she died. FatSister and SmallCat licked themselves bald when they weren't up on her lap. The stray Tom always got his food before she laid down for her nap. On senior citizen discount day I'd see her pushing her cart filled to the brim with chicken, for Chaddie, who had a bad heart. She never played bingo or took a golf lesson; she steered clear of church-- her cats, her obsession.

Up the ladder: What Have You Swallowed
Down the ladder: Teletubbies shall not hate.

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.375
Weighted score: 5.3697944
Overall Rank: 3255
Posted: April 6, 2003 9:08 PM PDT; Last modified: April 6, 2003 9:08 PM PDT
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[n/a] -=SeTTle=- @ 68.14.26.239 | 6-Apr-03/9:09 PM | Reply
ZZINIA IS A CRAZY CAT LADY. read my new poems AMORE.
[8] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 | 6-Apr-03/9:16 PM | Reply
It took me until the third stanza to realize this was about cats. I can be dense sometimes.

I like it.
I like quite a bit.
[n/a] <~> @ 64.252.186.250 > Bill Z Bub | 6-Apr-03/9:25 PM | Reply
well, it's more about how she makes the cats her circle of friends, and less about the actual cats themselves. because, you know, apart from the narrator, there's only her and them there cats.
[7] Frass @ 205.243.24.65 | 7-Apr-03/8:45 AM | Reply
Nicely done, Zzin; I could see this as a cat rap. Friends of mine clean carpets and had to work at a townhouse where the woman had over 100 cats and the whole place was layered in dreck like you wouldn't believe.
[7] Ranger @ 213.1.45.6 | 7-Apr-03/12:19 PM | Reply
Not bad. Not quite as good as some of your other stuff. Oh well.
[1] asimpleman @ 202.141.239.129 | 7-Apr-03/4:14 PM | Reply
wwhy don't these ppl help kids in the hood or somethin......no cats r more important.....
[8] god'swife @ 209.178.177.146 | 7-Apr-03/6:26 PM | Reply
I think this deserves to be extended a bit. As you say it's about her isolating herself from other humans. Maybe talk about her children/ex-husband/sisters etc? I want to know more about your lady. do you know why she dislikes us so? Could you tell me that? What happened to her? Don't give it away, just give me a little hint, so my imagination can come up with its own scenarios. I think that would work really well with this story.
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