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la vieja loca con los gatos (Free verse) by <~>

Huss had a taste for vole spleen and Tibb for starling head but Ted would bring her robins, live, and wait for her in bed. El Blanco would howl and pace with his good ear cocked to the sky; The Slimp, she'd sneak away, like Tempest did when she died. FatSister and SmallCat licked themselves bald when they weren't up on her lap. The stray Tom always got his food before she laid down for her nap. On senior citizen discount day I'd see her pushing her cart filled to the brim with chicken, for Chaddie, who had a bad heart. She never played bingo or took a golf lesson; she steered clear of church-- her cats, her obsession.

god'swife 7-Apr-03/6:26 PM
I think this deserves to be extended a bit. As you say it's about her isolating herself from other humans. Maybe talk about her children/ex-husband/sisters etc? I want to know more about your lady. do you know why she dislikes us so? Could you tell me that? What happened to her? Don't give it away, just give me a little hint, so my imagination can come up with its own scenarios. I think that would work really well with this story.




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