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Pathetic (Free verse) by openwounds you never know pain until
you are a joke, everyone laughs
and the world stands still.
your tears mean nothing to them
the day you were born was the day
you were condemned.
you'll try to be cool
you'll try to fit in
but you'll never be one of them.
you'll sit in your room and cry at night
but you'll never be good enough to end
this fight.
then comes suicide, a failed attempt
fifteen tylenol won't do the trick
maybe you'll give up and just be
yourself.
but no matter what, you'll never be good
enough for any of
t h e m
Up the ladder:
A Losing Streak
Down the ladder:
Choose
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Posted: March 23, 2003 4:18 PM PST; Last modified: March 23, 2003 11:57 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.2241178 Overall Rank: 4265 Comments:
Very honest writing, Pnwnds. Yes, you'll never be good enough for them, and you'll never BE them. Maybe that's a good thing.
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As for you open wounds you remind me of this girl I know. If things are as bad as you say they are then you have three major choice you can make. Either change things (Blind's way, or any other), Leave things as they are, be misearible, or option number three. Stop caring about being apart of the crowd and be as absolutly different as you can be. <=#3 could be considered option #1 but it being different isn't really a change for you I guess and its not really staying the same either.
Oh yeah I like this alot. I'd like to use your piece as lyrics for my band with your permission. -10-
Not to be mean or anything but I think your first line is missing a word.
and yeah, you're right. i just noticed the missing word - "know"