on Adam's Apple by hotwire
3 Jun 2003, 12:19 AM
fag.
on That November Night by hotwire
2 Jun 2003, 11:49 PM
I really enjoyed your unacceptance of the past-tense, and your depiction of the word 'meant'. Really, it was captivating.
on Techno Whore by hotwire
2 Jun 2003, 11:45 PM
Indeedy.
on nothing is by w~* ATHENA *~w
2 Jun 2003, 11:39 PM
Yeah, pretty drunk.
replying on Four Chapters from the Detective Plum files by horus8
2 Jun 2003, 1:35 PM
No, make me.
replying on How I want to be by Felzpoet
2 Jun 2003, 12:03 PM
Are you implying that I'm an idiot? Or are you just trying take the focus off of this idiot's poetry?
replying on Mississipi Murder by scitz
2 Jun 2003, 11:57 AM
LOL! A-ha. Did you read the dirt on Martin Luther King? Hilarious. Really, this site is the cat's meow.
replying on Four Chapters from the Detective Plum files by horus8
2 Jun 2003, 10:57 AM
It's a bicep wound, and he feels the backdrip (basically, knows that he's bleeding) when he goes to hang his coat above his head. I suppose I did not make that clear enough for you? and yes the borderline part is redundant, but these things happen when one writes from the heart, and not the brain.lol
replying on Plucking hearts and banjo by horus8
1 Jun 2003, 8:52 PM
You know what? You are funny.
replying on Plucking hearts and banjo by horus8
1 Jun 2003, 8:50 PM
I was of the opinion that a counterfactual could be applied to any fact able to be contrasted against its origin of opinion, which ironically would make this comment a counterfactual. Now, on to more relevant criteria. You think I should continue with Plum in the coat-room, or post, and or pre-grandfather's feast of 'the obese attendant'.
replying on Plucking hearts and banjo by horus8
1 Jun 2003, 6:43 PM
Easy there Skyler, it's a poem not a personality test.
replying on Plucking hearts and banjo by horus8
1 Jun 2003, 6:42 PM
If it was, I'd believe you.
replying on Collapsing the heart by Sugar Victim
1 Jun 2003, 6:39 PM
You are welcome.
on Aftermath of a boston marriage by Sugar Victim
1 Jun 2003, 4:19 PM
Overall, not a bad collection, but it's not setting new standards, that's for sure. I would of given you sixes and sevens. Maybe an eight after some editing.
on Aftermath of a boston marriage by Sugar Victim
1 Jun 2003, 4:17 PM
"prays for hope as her world uncurls" unfurls, would work better. nameless.
"Maybe though dieng you'll see we're not unalike!"" through dying. Also, the piece needs to put come commas to work for it.
"Maybe though dieng you'll see we're not unalike!"" through dying. Also, the piece needs to put come commas to work for it.
on Collapsing the heart by Sugar Victim
1 Jun 2003, 4:13 PM
"one second you cold ,the next hot" you're. It's.
"behind still holding to you" onto.
"behind still holding to you" onto.
on ILLusion in Falsity by Sugar Victim
1 Jun 2003, 4:10 PM
excuses, notice the c.