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Aftermath of a boston marriage (Free verse) by Sugar Victim
She lies crumpled on the floor
Her bodies beaten,weak and sore
Who's to blame?
For her anguish and her pain
They took away her heart her serenity and name
And as they hit her with such hate
she screams through tears,but it's too late
They sway overhead carving her soul
their blind fury has taken it's toll
And now this nameless broken girl
prays for hope as her world uncurls
with words that burn
They watch her bleed without concern
She is nothing just a shell
Although right now it's hard to tell
She whispers something with undeniable strife
And courage as she slips from life,
"I am not nameless you've deemed me a dyke
Maybe though dying you'll see we're not unalike!"
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6666665
Weighted score: 5.0794687
Overall Rank: 6392
Posted: June 1, 2003 4:04 PM PDT; Last modified: June 1, 2003 4:22 PM PDT
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"Maybe though dieng you'll see we're not unalike!"" through dying. Also, the piece needs to put come commas to work for it.