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Free verse № 21461

Plucking hearts and banjo

Member since 2002 · Posted 21 Oct 2002 · Edited 1 Jun 2003 · 14 comments

I'm over it now I think That left footed wind-up-nut-kick. Patented & humbled. I wretch kneel pet your hand. My needs were not my own. Therefore, I own up to nothing. Pass me your favorite holiday like you passed me that malaria net. I just bet you are worth every sweat-slept-shake. See my compass, spin, wander, grovel back, I should, but back to what? I want to say something, now, to you. What was our love to the moment? To the weather? Shoved Undefoot & moody. Hood up, I stretch walk the gutter. Another, Mississippi lover Was it a mud skipper? A wave to Huck Fin that broke me free. Contretemps by the mouthful. I fought back success with a four foot sunflower. While Errol Flynning dark wood glossed floors. Tequila toasts raised to Mexican Vikings, and star blackened Druids. Manhandeled. I-love-I-love What with the tempo met and all. I stall, again. Reptilian trowel me out like you troweled me in. Current roll I wish I could decorate you forever. Marsh gas, but no, Instead, I thumb back to mother to find her in the form of some other, young girl. Wretched & tight, minded. Charcoal hairing midnight, filtered. I love them to love you. Outside, I am without-within. Depraving the low flex. Upgrading, and levied. liable to love you to death.

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14 comments

[7] INTRANSIT 21-Oct-02/7:34 AM Reply
Jagged, endless possibilities, and WIERD to say the least. You are strange. "Everyones strange, when you're a stranger"...7 because I pulled little from it. Probably me.
[8] god'swife 21-Oct-02/8:46 AM Reply
Very good. malaria net and huck fin are my favorites. Its errol flynn isn't it?
[7] Frass 21-Oct-02/1:24 PM Reply
This is one of my favourite H8 rambles; I like the wordplay and the line breaks. Tops are "left footed wind-up nut-kick" and "star blackened druids".
[n/a] deleted user 1-Jun-03/3:51 PM Reply
Okay, you can stop now.
[n/a] horus8 › deleted user 1-Jun-03/4:05 PM Reply
No, go fuck yourself with a portable radio.
[n/a] deleted user › horus8 1-Jun-03/4:51 PM Reply
Nice comeback.
[n/a] horus8 › deleted user 1-Jun-03/6:42 PM Reply
If it was, I'd believe you.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › horus8 1-Jun-03/6:49 PM Reply
What theory of counterfactual conditionals do you subscribe to? I am a magic ersatzist.
[10] Bachus › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 1-Jun-03/7:29 PM Reply
I subscribe to marinescience and field and stream, making me a neoplanktonist in a blinder.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Bachus 1-Jun-03/8:25 PM Reply
I must confess I hadn't realised 'marinescience and field and stream' had anything to do with counterfactuals. Let's dig up David Lewis and cram a fish down his rotting throat and see what he has to say about it!
[n/a] horus8 › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 1-Jun-03/8:50 PM Reply
I was of the opinion that a counterfactual could be applied to any fact able to be contrasted against its origin of opinion, which ironically would make this comment a counterfactual. Now, on to more relevant criteria. You think I should continue with Plum in the coat-room, or post, and or pre-grandfather's feast of 'the obese attendant'.
[n/a] horus8 › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 1-Jun-03/8:52 PM Reply
You know what? You are funny.
[n/a] Fear of Garbage 1-Jun-03/4:34 PM Reply
therefore you own up to nothing?
yeah, i bet you don't.
how chillingly creepy.
[n/a] horus8 › Fear of Garbage 1-Jun-03/6:43 PM Reply
Easy there Skyler, it's a poem not a personality test.