Re: Z higher of arts by ==Doylum	21-Jun-03/10:02 AM
A dandy
Re: Elephant Man by Kitch	21-Jun-03/10:12 AM
Elephant tic (whyku) by Lyme disease Better pack your trunk Cuz we're moving on up Dumbo needs peanuts
Re: Women Fight Dirty by scitz	21-Jun-03/10:25 AM
Tight edit. Did you read my Sestina yet? I play both ways like neon deon shizowee for dowry.
Re: Fusion by Kitch	21-Jun-03/10:59 AM
The whispering wind spoke our names, and what if fate listened? As those two bodies glistened. Two lips kissing by crackling twigs, and toasty split flames. What if I were stroking your spine, with smoother of fingers? Touching you in broken rhymes of spontaneity. That beg you come play with me. Where sensation lingers nocturnally. Beauty, they say, is skin deep. So I must kiss you from outside in. Until you scream, and find your dreams spent relaxing to fein collapsable satasfaction. I'll be stretching you completely. So your body winds right. Kissing you indiscreetly 'till you feel just me. 'till the moon yields waning Into a sun that knows no night. Stroking your hair violently, Whilst oscillating silently. Waiting for your crime to be. Some said thing to crave and profile If it helps the moment, I'll say "I love you". If this attraction proves too hot No one shall tire, but you when green lights stop. The twirling fans shadow. Cooling sweat on a well worked man. I'll kiss the pink off your lips, and crawl me a wildfire between your hips, and then in the morning I'll request a name. To do it again all day and retain This is no illusion, but if I'm wrong, please do not say Just carnal chess in full fusion Let our bodies play.
Re: Fusion by Kitch	21-Jun-03/11:02 AM
My fee for this spectacular edit? Your sole rolled in olive oil.
Re: Angels Struggle by SupremeDreamer	22-Jun-03/12:45 AM
Thank the heavens that you copyrighted this piece Mr. Supreme. Lord knows I was this close to stealing it away and using it to polish my deluxe asswagon.
Re: OM by SupremeDreamer	22-Jun-03/12:48 AM
Transperancy actually, no offense, just helping your copyrighted material along.
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Jun-03/12:49 AM
Yeah, me too.
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Jun-03/12:56 AM
Sound like a case for Rumi, or oral sex. Not a bad spread of poetry Supremie. Young and flailing, but honestly passionate. I'll vote when I'm not so hammered. Please remove your copyright gibberish, it's silly and pointless. Just by writing it here alone is copyright enough young Jedi poet stoner scream from my new chrome toaster. Besides 5 years from now you'll have rewritten these to fuckville & back so relax.
Re: Operation Candy Apple Tango by thepinkbunnyofdoom	22-Jun-03/11:23 AM
Sounds like another molested Denny's breakfast. I would suggest a grammar & spelling check, because there are a few minor problems, in every line.
Re: the rules by XangryXblondeX	22-Jun-03/1:07 PM
Nice wig
Re: The Dry Wash by Kitch	23-Jun-03/6:29 AM
Not bad, and simple, to the point, and as refreshing as waking up naked in the zoo.
regarding some deleted poem...	23-Jun-03/6:48 AM
Unfortunately the last one passed on yesterday, and I fear us next. Quick to the (ass)hat mobile, and step on it. There are a couple of very humorous lines here, and it's a sonnet, and that's a plus being that's what you went for. I bring this up because, well in the flat warm Cherrycoke flood in the sweet year of 19dashidee4, I set out to pen an most pleasing of Sonnets and came out instead with a lb. of cubed Colby Chedder still mooing. All be it surprised, and a bit shaken we became best friends until I accidentilly used it as a stool thickener during a time of much running and flushing, naturally, I appologized, and found much needed closure.
Re: Pilgrimage by Christof	23-Jun-03/7:02 AM
A sunclap, hmmmm it's not every day an original word of this nature works well, and it did. i think a lot about fusing words because well when you can't spell for shit or punctuate, you better fuse words better than most or pray you can get by with borrowed & rearranged titles, because being able to make highly symbolic and triple edged hybrids like "sunclap" is as important of a tool in a poets chest, as listening is to an actor. Take a nine and <chicky chicky chew> Will can tame a shrew.
Re: The Ode Of Clever Machine by SupremeDreamer	23-Jun-03/9:27 AM
Ah, the smell of burnt love in the morning, priceless.
Re: Bittersweet Emotions by buzzkilled	24-Jun-03/11:26 AM
Wow dude, next time, use both barrels.
Re: -=Dark_Angel=- -=In_Decline=- by wEdible Underpantsw	24-Jun-03/11:32 AM
Cheese grater? Don't you mean a cotex.
Re: the nature of our stillborn by Crakyamuni	24-Jun-03/11:37 AM
Because it's not, it's a virus called SCARS
Re: Maman: Psychic Tophet by SupremeDreamer	24-Jun-03/11:44 AM
There are some brilliant twists and observations in here. Compact it by 50%. find and correct some typos and misspells. And there could be a couple of structural improvements.
Re: A Gordian knot (Some dirt on a friend of mine) by Bachus	24-Jun-03/11:51 AM
Listen Bachus, I know you mean well, but since people suspect that you're really me (not) this comes across as being just a bit conceited and creepy. Do me favor, please do not discuss my past without filling out the appropriate paper work for a proper license and waivers. Thanks, carry on, drunk.