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OM (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer
What is the mask
She wears.. oh widow,
She walks and talks
Mumbling..
But saying
Nothing.
Fool, consumed
Confused, hazed
Forever changing
Becoming one with
All..
Above it,
With balance,
No emotion, but all
Emotion, in balance.
Clear is the mask,
Transparency for the
Ones who see..
Then the mask
Is illusion,
And they can see
What these calm
Skies see.
- Om.
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.75
Weighted score: 5.201706
Overall Rank: 4538
Posted: June 21, 2003 11:16 PM PDT; Last modified: June 22, 2003 3:22 AM PDT
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--I had Transperancy mispelled, its been fixed
All in good humor no? :)
You come out of no where first making a big questionare over what I "fixed" simply to ridicule me, then make this large statement how mispellings aren't a joke, blah blah blah.
What are you man? A robot who never makes mistakes? what pathetic creature holds value to some pathetic "maturity award" to bring pride and a boost to his ego.
I don't know horus8 much, but from his work (which is 99.9% amazing) and his attitude compared to yours, he should be given your preciouse award of maturity, for he actually has character and personality, and lets not forget, a very strong sense of humor.
So while you move in like some vultcher to make me bow down to your fragile glory, the "rogues" are making sure art still has its true roots.. your kind is the disgrace to poetry and art.
Its quite sad really, I mention to you of possibly providing more constructive criticism for my poem, and you blab about maturity awards.. congradulations, your the perfect VIP for the next bloated company. ;)
your the early morning entertainment... ;) Also, what is this so called standard of being mature? Being subtly malicious? Your very amusing. Face it, your just a silly pathetic man filled with his own pathetic setups of arguements well clothed in authorative "maturity". Its just another form of starting shit, cept the difference is that I have balls to express my opinion without the candy coating. (but wait, you want me to me Mr goodboy right and feel blessed to have you "guide me..) Yeah, I know the same old shit, seen it all over the place, and its only the rebels that get more interesting and have much more diverse personalities.. but you guys still keep the good ole "I pray to jesus and confess my sins" routine. Instead of atonement, your cleansed with these nice awards to encourage us not to get in the way of your facist thought process.. we should "appreciate" it.. just like the christian tells me I need to accept jesus into my heart. *fart* ahhh.. simple delicate release of waste...
And I will rejoice that Everythinng is One the energy of life interconnected in everything that is and will be. ;) I pray to nothing, but simply have awakened from illusion, but i pity YOU brother for needing that crutch. wake up and realize the divinity within that goes without. ;)
You will find the rest of this comment posted as a recent under the title "Gordian knot" enjoy.
Or we can simply let up and let the angel choke on the feces coming out his mouth and let him and the conquered lands rot into nothingness.. either way, we win, he loses.. ;)