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The Dry Wash (Free verse) by Kitch
Clouds absorbed the Aryan sun, That lit a path on to the oceans panorama, Alone with the conflict of nature, Everything came together, Sewn in sound, and vision. A Star Clipper sailed on gold velvet, Controlled by the breaths of Poseidon, Watched by dreamers like me, Whose thoughts drift away, Like the constant sea.

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6
Weighted score: 4.9523187
Overall Rank: 8935
Posted: June 23, 2003 6:12 AM PDT; Last modified: June 23, 2003 7:58 AM PDT
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[7] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 23-Jun-03/6:29 AM | Reply
Not bad, and simple, to the point, and as refreshing as waking up naked in the zoo.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 66.81.159.207 | 23-Jun-03/8:04 AM | Reply
calming vision.. its like the sigh expressed after sex.. hmm what to bless you with.. ill give this a -6-
[7] richa @ 195.92.168.175 | 24-Jun-03/1:32 PM | Reply
quite good

im not sure the two verses necessarily hang

like a landscape painting really, which is difficult to express in poems ask bob dylan
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