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The Dry Wash (Free verse) by Kitch

Clouds absorbed the Aryan sun, That lit a path on to the oceans panorama, Alone with the conflict of nature, Everything came together, Sewn in sound, and vision. A Star Clipper sailed on gold velvet, Controlled by the breaths of Poseidon, Watched by dreamers like me, Whose thoughts drift away, Like the constant sea.

richa 24-Jun-03/1:32 PM
quite good

im not sure the two verses necessarily hang

like a landscape painting really, which is difficult to express in poems ask bob dylan




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