| Re: Summer Rain by DJCARTER |
19-Jul-03/7:01 AM |
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If you could pause time... You wouldn't bother to even worry about feeling sorry for yourself anymore. They'd give a commercial, a comic book, a shoe in your image, and then you'd feel like the rest of them, listless and trite. And also, meant something to what? The kids at school? Your dog? Your parents? The world? Please, you're going to make me wheep sheep, big fluffy mutton falling from my baby boy eyes. Those that wait for change, never do. Grab life by the horns not the donuts.
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| Re: I've lost my poetic edge by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
19-Jul-03/1:00 PM |
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Usually, one must possess something in order to lose it. Glad to see you bucking trends. Maybe what you thought was a poetic edge was actually a ruptured strawberry flavored condom, and now your face is pregnant?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
19-Jul-03/1:06 PM |
Disabled (Pooku) by -=Patio_Chair=-
No! A rubber stamp
On my welfare envelope!
Drinking on my porch.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
19-Jul-03/4:43 PM |
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To bad, son, and I'm not your friend. My friends know how to spell 'lightning', idiot.
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| Re: Joe is Dead Now by Freethinker1602 |
19-Jul-03/7:27 PM |
Jesus, you're good. You should write eulogies for a living. The funeral companies would love you. For every person they buried your poetry would kill nine more in the process.
Try flowers, they smell good and contrast well against black back drops.
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| Re: Tears and Tombstones by OnTheOtherHand |
19-Jul-03/7:40 PM |
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I'll give you a five for the last stanza because I liked it, but it was a shitslide getting there, good christ, no wonder you've distanced it from the rest of the piece.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
19-Jul-03/7:46 PM |
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Here is some advice, notice how my poems are aquiring a stack of zeros and hits galore? That's when you know you've struck a nerve, that's when you know you've got them red in the face. this poem of yours though exciting! is outmatched by the power of your user name, drawing away the focus, see? You want them to laugh at the poem not your user name. That's premature ejaculation my friend, and no good.
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19-Jul-03/8:02 PM |
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LOL! watching you write poetry is like watching an old preacher from Arkansas gum an alter boy to death... Jesus, I dare anyone to read this out loud without laughing. Ha! Good bejesus, that's too good to be true. It's like Bobcat Goldthweight getting philosophical about alchoholism, or over-eating... You are just too cute, too cute. Ha! Ha! It's like "Deep thoughts" by Jack Handy on Saturday night live.
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20-Jul-03/12:19 PM |
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| Re: Bloody Night by Ted Bundy |
20-Jul-03/12:23 PM |
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The only worthwhile thing in this poem is the word "stright" which means; to write with ones teeth while in a straight jacket. The rest is pg.
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20-Jul-03/7:43 PM |
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I have nothing but love to give, nothing but love.
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20-Jul-03/7:44 PM |
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| Re: far but close by KagatoSan |
20-Jul-03/8:00 PM |
in a Bar with glen close (Freed nurse) by gatogordo OBGYN
I look out my vagina.
i see the Dr., tis' a distant mustache.
Aiming at a girl,
with a pillow.
hung so testicularly.
It was soft for him.
but now it's hard for me.
She is, like a pie,
steaming in a window.
ready to get fingered!
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| Re: hermetic by Bill Z Bub |
20-Jul-03/11:20 PM |
and the candles have turned (1 note)
you tricked me with your secrets
you kept me with your chants
you held me with your blood (second note)
Besides that, you gotta know I dug it.
I'll wait to see if you edit to vote.
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| Re: null by Bill Z Bub |
20-Jul-03/11:22 PM |
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That's why you're a pro mate. Fantastic work here, just damn fine craftsmanship.
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| Re: When Tomorrow Starts Without Me by Artemis745 |
20-Jul-03/11:31 PM |
I love seeing people gamble all of their chips on eternity with god in heaven without a plan b...
It's just damn brave, damn brave thinking. I especially loved the stories of how heaven was made of precious metals with a lamb for every lap. Yes, Jesus is good to us. I hope he has a castle on the clouds and everyone just eats all day and never gets fat ot old and all ancestors back to Abraham and Adam are there to share JOY! Yeah, heaven, wow, I just can't fucking wait *bang* (Another teenage suicide brought to you by Ballmark, a better greeting card because it's been marked by hairy greasy nuts and robovac, like your pool cleaner another stupid thing that turns on and cleans, but never quite good enough for you to not have to go back over its work anyway.)
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| Re: Seduce Like Zeus by EAger to Offend |
21-Jul-03/11:46 AM |
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I believe He would of stayed with the Euro.
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| Re: I am the gayest by walrus8 |
21-Jul-03/11:47 AM |
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| Re: Yellow Star by Mr Pig |
21-Jul-03/11:52 AM |
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The difference between Jews and American Indians is the tribes don't fucking whine on a daily basis, and they are still piss broke and suffering. While the Jews are once again on the top, in control of everything, as always still fucking pretending like they got it bad. Perhaps you should do a piece on the Pygmies plight called "White dwarf".
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| Re: looking for him by Freethinker1602 |
21-Jul-03/11:56 AM |
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Perhaps you should rent a cherry picker and join him?
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