on some deleted poem
14 Jan 2004, 1:42 PM
I'd drop the last line entirely, but you know me.
on some deleted poem
14 Jan 2004, 1:51 PM
Maybe then? You should stop being so queer.
on Dry Beast Night by fevriere
14 Jan 2004, 1:54 PM
Good, but irk? My ownly complaint would be a touch muddled, but highly imaginative. Structure was flawless, bravo.
on Fake Happiness by WithoutLife
10 Jan 2004, 10:10 AM
I must agree with everyone. this sets new perimeters to cliche poetry, and very well could be the secret missing formula. But the line "sweet snacks of out get together". made me laugh and itch ring worm.
on She Said by TheWhiteLion777
12 Jan 2004, 9:40 PM
That was a fine impression of a six headed wombat, but I was looking for an lemon lemur in pine scent?
on American Eden v.2 [revised] by SupremeDreamer
12 Jan 2004, 12:30 PM
Canonic... sweit.
on Malaysia by Crakyamuni
10 Jan 2004, 6:46 PM
Jesus, your end chucks it? It was great until the last two lines? Do I have to teach you how to end a poem?
on New commandments by little_big_nose
12 Jan 2004, 12:43 PM
There once was a twisted poof wizard
that had the poetical skills of a lizard
that had died on the road
humping a horny toad
With a leaky chode set to explode.
that had the poetical skills of a lizard
that had died on the road
humping a horny toad
With a leaky chode set to explode.
on My Castle by Cougarchic
9 Jan 2004, 12:51 PM
A steaming turd just bristling with activity.
on some deleted poem
9 Jan 2004, 12:54 PM
Could you perhaps tear the windows and shatter the cloth so as not to be so excruciatingly boring next time? God, you would think you'd get sick of the cliche for a while and grow some balls of originality.
on Runaway by Cougarchic
9 Jan 2004, 12:57 PM
So your saying don't run away? Jog in? walk within? Do the homeless have a harmonica or a quartet around a burn barrel?
on Ode to the Wolf by Cougarchic
9 Jan 2004, 1:01 PM
I like how you used slyly and sly in the same poem with a fox to describe a wolf? Pumagirl!!! yay for you! This is hardly an ode? there's no indians, no game tax, no wolf boots? what kind of poet are you? This is a chode to lemurs if anything.
on some deleted poem
29 Dec 2003, 1:07 PM
outstanding work here.
on some deleted poem
31 Dec 2003, 1:50 PM
I love you, you should call more.
on Too obvious by INTRANSIT
3 Jan 2004, 1:32 AM
Have you ever got a zit in your ear?!!!!!! It's fucking murder.
on Snowboarding, Sierra Nevada, 12/31/03 by Plaidypus
3 Jan 2004, 3:42 AM
how you endowed angels and demons into this poem is why you are hopeless.