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Runaway (Free verse) by Cougarchic Everyone thinks their family's the worst.
What do they do?
Runaway of-course!
They run from their problems.
Not toward their dreams.
They think it will help them to run far away.
It's to late when the realize they just should have stayed
Faced up to their problems, took hold of their dreams
When they sit with the homeless, and wonder why hadn't they stayed
Up the ladder:
In Love as in Love
Down the ladder:
The lost perfume of my yellow-rose-Girl
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Posted: January 9, 2004 12:02 AM PST; Last modified: January 9, 2004 12:02 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.134471 Overall Rank: 5584 Comments:
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titan69 @ 62.31.23.68
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9-Jan-04/11:20 AM
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so true!!
So your saying don't run away? Jog in? walk within? Do the homeless have a harmonica or a quartet around a burn barrel?
i think this could be shortened, or slightly less repetitive, you use the same word- ex stayed and run and away too often. change it up a little.
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