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Fire (Free verse) by Pervy Elf
When I look at you I know you feel it, too. This fire burning inside me, reaching out to burn even you. Touch me here, kiss me there. Yeah baby, I feel it, too. This fire burning inside me, reaching out to burn even you. Harder! I cry, and harder you comply. Faster you move, reaching further inside me. Deep Deep Deeper Until you reach my very core. Yeah baby, I know you can feel it, too. This fire burning inside me, reaching out to burn even you. Higher and higher we climb. Oh baby, now you're mine. I have you trapped now, just so you know. Trapped within my fire, burning for me and you.

Up the ladder: Closed Doors
Down the ladder: Special Place

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.1666665
Weighted score: 5.0448236
Overall Rank: 6998
Posted: December 25, 2003 8:15 PM PST; Last modified: December 25, 2003 8:15 PM PST
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Comments:
[8] Blindpoetry @ 68.106.171.15 | 25-Dec-03/9:59 PM | Reply
Romantic, no? hm.. though, I can't help but think this was inspired by sex...?
[8] horus8 @ 24.126.116.54 | 26-Dec-03/2:17 PM | Reply
I once knew this girl that wanted me to stick my foot in her vagina,and I did, but I could never look at her without laughing again, so that kind of sucked.
[7] richa @ 81.178.240.218 | 27-Dec-03/3:47 PM | Reply
'I have you trapped now' seemed a little odd. Can girls do that?

Other than that OK, there is a certain sadness underneath all the clumsiness.
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