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Fire (Free verse) by Pervy Elf

When I look at you I know you feel it, too. This fire burning inside me, reaching out to burn even you. Touch me here, kiss me there. Yeah baby, I feel it, too. This fire burning inside me, reaching out to burn even you. Harder! I cry, and harder you comply. Faster you move, reaching further inside me. Deep Deep Deeper Until you reach my very core. Yeah baby, I know you can feel it, too. This fire burning inside me, reaching out to burn even you. Higher and higher we climb. Oh baby, now you're mine. I have you trapped now, just so you know. Trapped within my fire, burning for me and you.

richa 27-Dec-03/3:47 PM
'I have you trapped now' seemed a little odd. Can girls do that?

Other than that OK, there is a certain sadness underneath all the clumsiness.




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