on save it from the age by abecedarian
30 Oct 2002, 5:41 PM
manly p. hall? the secret teachings of all ages...would eleviate that boards creak, or make it louder in time i think...i don't remember maybe both. you're getting lots of swell votes..take a look.B
on some deleted poem
30 Oct 2002, 11:31 PM
this is going straight to the worst list with gold wings...congradulations..i have a fealing you want it that way..so i'll help...let me know...cuz i care..that much 0. nice shape...reminds me of peeing in a snow bank in cursive.
on An Enchanting Vision of Beauty by dalva
31 Oct 2002, 12:47 AM
change last line "like" her to "than" her...it would be great...have a nine also.. and it is prose, but so what....just list it next time as other.
on before bethlehem by royalflesh
31 Oct 2002, 2:43 AM
stanza seven...line 6 "very"....that's brilliant...social security checks for the well manured...and perhaps a motor home trip to the four corners...10.
on realities <from above their brilliance is short-lived> by royalflesh
31 Oct 2002, 2:50 AM
make it a brick mosaic, so you lose the double use of the word mud and fix the mispell, maybe violet to violent? the "vodka mumble" is quite quotably delicious and...than lose the last stanza entirely...good luck...and thanks for the vodka mumble..i will use it well..d
on crime scene (not for the weak!) by t_t_redhot
31 Oct 2002, 2:56 AM
you kept my interest so...keep the eight. 8. do a series of these...they're damn good.8.l
on The rendition (once bad movie night) by ~incarnate~
30 Oct 2002, 5:25 PM
here's a diced date instead. with microwaved butter flavored poisoning, cheers!
on Poem Ranker by abecedarian
30 Oct 2002, 5:35 PM
unreal...ha! little bit of the slippered champagne i see. never, and i mean never let that cad diminish your toot...he lost an eye last week to a blow gunning pygmy so..see.. he's a bit blind and tempermental these days...some gay priest knocked all of the change out of his hand, and the morrison shrine in paris and called him a sharp tongued alter boy twice removed and..well...he hasn't been the same really..plus there's this thing with settle and d.a (they won't let him cook the eggo to even be able to leggo?) that he's got brewing on a ethereal level in his left buttocks..(on the down lo, that is) so here's a nine from us here at the foundaton. 9. <brought to you by 'pining nuts' more than just a snack....and 'bra snap' the only way to fly>
on some deleted poem
30 Oct 2002, 5:44 PM
and they have such dirty teeth also..peroxide and a taxidermist.be well, yours truly chris mCdruely.e
on the trite scifi plot by ~incarnate~
30 Oct 2002, 7:37 PM
and den? woody woodpecker hits a knot. denting his beak.
on boy girl by little_angel_maria
28 Oct 2002, 2:50 PM
well i guess, i'm going to give up cussing now, and drink a glass of insta-mature(cuz i'm hurting all of the sensitive poets feelings, and so on "reala poetas" deserve more appropriate and positive criticism)...there.better. FUCK! burnt my tongue..umm.great layout yeah..tricky. clever. deep.yeah.
p.s for those of you who need to know the real truth behind anothers feelings about your work, go fucking read it to your shrink or your priest, but don't expect to put fucking trash up in front of someone who takes poetry mucho serioso (like me and darkangle and lonedisco29.5, and not get bitch slapped) i hope i make you cry, and your dad and your boyfriend come And beat me up..cuz i'm fucken ready beeatch, and i got a set of tube steak glow in the dark helmets for the lot of you. whose your daddy now? oh nice poem. really 8.
p.s for those of you who need to know the real truth behind anothers feelings about your work, go fucking read it to your shrink or your priest, but don't expect to put fucking trash up in front of someone who takes poetry mucho serioso (like me and darkangle and lonedisco29.5, and not get bitch slapped) i hope i make you cry, and your dad and your boyfriend come And beat me up..cuz i'm fucken ready beeatch, and i got a set of tube steak glow in the dark helmets for the lot of you. whose your daddy now? oh nice poem. really 8.
on some deleted poem
28 Oct 2002, 10:05 AM
you suck. cock? yes! indeed. now out the doggie door with ya, accompanied by your permenant valintines day candy collection. bitch whore sock rock...you are a wet bag of cocaine. diluted and worthless. good day.
on Second Attempt at Haiku by loneshadow29
28 Oct 2002, 10:15 AM
what do you think should happen to the bad guys, lone blee blah? i'm really that interested. fucking cads. trick candles? wow. that's genu-wine and prophetic. blee blee blah blah. congrats lonedisco29.5! you win the blee blah award for eternal bliss in blissania. enjoy your trip. and you frass, should be put down also with mohammed and the carribean pool boy..you just know deep down he was blowing the older one as the trigger got pulled...you just gotta know huh..yes. i know. they'll burn like 4th of july red devil stand fountains..there afros will compress and implode as their eyes deflate and their long thick black uncut penises do the zipper shine into forever...yes into forever.....yes..into foreverm as a a a trend.3.
on Living Conditions by Christof
26 Oct 2002, 8:52 AM
i would of liked more, but i guess autumn is about waning. huh? 6. liked the cheeky clouds by the way. carry on. tonights my last night as captain von trapp. i think that calls for some filipino hookers and some speedballs in the back of an rv moving at a good fourty-five mph. heading east with a well paid driver (a sober black madagascrian of course) how long would it take me to get to sioux city, south dakota? stopping to pee every hour on the hour, (from hollywood) and to buy some teriyaki beef jerky...that's a nasty riddle..the winner gets a lifetime supply of salt and vinegar lays potato chips. good day
on IMMIGRATION by ali
26 Oct 2002, 9:39 AM
a total fucking towel head..i recommend you go to gangbox.com and listen to little johnies jihad.mp3 and then the phoebe snow, for maximum quotable lip smacks...cuz right now your lingo isn't even quite bingo. g7. 0.
on Rain Doesn't Seem to Stop by ThoughtfulSoul
26 Oct 2002, 8:35 AM
alright noah...but can you side stroke the suez canal?
on Shadow's First Attempt at Haiku by loneshadow29
26 Oct 2002, 8:39 AM
(cherry spoons first attempt at attempting)life like a sandal/the soles protecting your feet/wish i were a snail?
on Words Only of Love by loneshadow29
26 Oct 2002, 8:42 AM
nice gambit. you fail miserably. now over the shoulder with you!
on some deleted poem
1 Nov 2002, 7:40 PM
great title! Bad poeme! 3.