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Second Attempt at Haiku (Free verse) by loneshadow29
thanks for the water life's flame will meet its end what? a trick candle?

Up the ladder: somewhere, i'm not
Down the ladder: to class

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Overall Rank: 12386
Posted: October 28, 2002 8:00 AM PST; Last modified: October 28, 2002 8:00 AM PST
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[6] Frass @ 66.160.116.193 | 28-Oct-02/8:29 AM | Reply
I like it, lnshdw; for my son's 20th b'day in August, I filled the cake with trick candles; he blew till he was blue in the face-hilarious.
What do you think, should the two sniper suspects' candles meet their end by being put to death in VA, or should MD try them?
[n/a] loneshadow29 @ 63.80.251.73 > Frass | 28-Oct-02/9:18 AM | Reply
Thanks for the comment Frass. :o) Regarding the snipers... I think that the strongest people from Maryland should tie ropes around their arms and the strongest people from Virginia should tie ropes around their legs... take them in the middle of the widest part of the potomac river... and hve themselves a lil tug-o-war... whoever gets them to their side, gets to try them. How does that sound? :o)
[3] horus8 @ 24.126.117.82 | 28-Oct-02/10:15 AM | Reply
what do you think should happen to the bad guys, lone blee blah? i'm really that interested. fucking cads. trick candles? wow. that's genu-wine and prophetic. blee blee blah blah. congrats lonedisco29.5! you win the blee blah award for eternal bliss in blissania. enjoy your trip. and you frass, should be put down also with mohammed and the carribean pool boy..you just know deep down he was blowing the older one as the trigger got pulled...you just gotta know huh..yes. i know. they'll burn like 4th of july red devil stand fountains..there afros will compress and implode as their eyes deflate and their long thick black uncut penises do the zipper shine into forever...yes into forever.....yes..into foreverm as a a a trend.3.
[n/a] loneshadow29 @ 63.80.251.73 > horus8 | 28-Oct-02/11:02 AM | Reply
uhhhh... thanks horus... I think...
[n/a] Limness @ 67.84.171.238 | 1-Jan-03/10:33 PM | Reply
huh?
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