| Re: moist towelettes by chinstrap |
10-Jun-03/9:28 AM |
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| Re: i'm the jesse james of the seven-eleven chain by Bachus |
10-Jun-03/9:24 AM |
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yoohoo rocks. gotta love chocolate water.
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| Re: European Pentameter by bondjedi |
10-Jun-03/9:22 AM |
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| Re: Emotionless by Roisin |
10-Jun-03/9:18 AM |
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| Re: Nelly's loving letter....to a dear lover Giles by dantron |
10-Jun-03/9:17 AM |
maybe instead of "popers" you should say "popery" - look it up.
oh- and as for this being a haiku, it isn't. as far as it being a good poem, it's not that, either.
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| Re: alone in winter by ~incarnate~ |
10-Jun-03/9:12 AM |
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| Re: Para Sa Aking Sinta by NewbieMe |
10-Jun-03/9:07 AM |
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mekka lekka hi mekka heiny ho.
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| Re: A Perfectly Reasonable Question by baughworm |
9-Jun-03/12:27 PM |
his knobby hands riding your hips?
I'm confused by this image,
like a coin operated horse at the supermarket?
that implies a climbing on, straddling motion, which confuses me, wouldn't the woman be straddling? Not the man's hands...
I'm confused.
I like the poem, but I am confused.
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| Re: a comment on Anouk by daniella |
2-Jun-03/5:11 AM |
I've witnessed a few births, and I don't ever remember anything bubbling up. My point is that the poemmmakes it sound like a tremendous fart happened, similar to a big bubble rising in hot mud. BLOOP!
Here's my thinking about your response. You owe reality nothing. just becasue it is the best way to state your perspective of exactly what happened doesn't make it good poetry. I was giving you a reader's response to your poem--and I beleive that if you need to have something "bubble up" there must be a better way of stating it.
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| Re: Stuck in the Past... by loneshadow29 |
29-May-03/10:47 AM |
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| Re: The Autopsy (as shown on Channel Four) by Nicholas Jones |
29-May-03/10:43 AM |
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| Re: While cleaning the aviary by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
29-May-03/10:42 AM |
is it aviary? or avery? I'll have to look that up.
great poem!
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| Re: Haiku Gymraeg by Nicholas Jones |
29-May-03/10:40 AM |
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oo ee oo aa aa bing bang walla walla ding dang.
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| Re: Walter Cronkite by UnityMitford |
29-May-03/10:39 AM |
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i like a good mlt. mutton lettuce and tomato sandwich...
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| Re: the love by sooz |
29-May-03/10:37 AM |
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awww.. pitter patter. like little feet. AAAAH!
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| Re: Shut the fuck up and fix me a Scoobie snack. by Bachus |
29-May-03/10:35 AM |
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overused the """"""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""""marks. cute concept!
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| Re: Suicide by Alyssa91 |
29-May-03/10:33 AM |
buried.
careful with the spelling...
If you are thinking of suicide, don't do it. I hope that you are mature enough to know that life will get better--pain dulls with time.
as for the poem, some of the rhymes seemed forced, interrupting the flow.
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| Re: Knife by Alyssa91 |
29-May-03/10:30 AM |
what is a medician?
Otherwise I liked it. somewhat sexual, somewhat angst-ridden.
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| Re: Anouk by daniella |
29-May-03/10:27 AM |
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I think this is lovely, save the "bubble rising at birth" being a troubling image of some odd body function. It takes the reader in the wrong direction early on.
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| Re: Happy Cancer! by Agemo-Z |
23-May-03/11:29 AM |
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