on The Ode that never was by Shardik
24 Jan 2003, 1:50 AM
gooooood 9
on some deleted poem
23 Jan 2003, 12:36 AM
you could work with this....but I can't...there is something good about it, but it's covered by filth. Clean it up for me.
on Afterglow by Imperfections
24 Jan 2003, 1:52 AM
nice...8
on some deleted poem
24 Jan 2003, 11:21 AM
Hillarious....9.
on some deleted poem
23 Jan 2003, 12:33 AM
shorty said.....you needs a sista then you wouldn't be writing shit like that to try to impress her....4
on SHADOWS OF DARKNESS by TanHand
16 Feb 2003, 6:39 PM
Do you know who King Diamond is? I'll see you in the grave you god forsaken whore.
on Forbidden Fruit by thepinkbunnyofdoom
15 Feb 2003, 7:54 PM
For 40K or for love I can, but for a pink bunny, I can't. Have you ever thought about a mail order bride? Yes.
on Asian Bicycle Saga by TanHand
15 Feb 2003, 7:59 PM
Ahhhh.....you took a line from a Lil' Kim song. You should try doing the Hungarian alphabet while you're at it.
on The Other Side of Me by Quarton
24 Jan 2003, 12:31 AM
You get a kiss and a lollipop from sexy Ornella for your fine, fine poem on the duality of humankind.
on some deleted poem
23 Jan 2003, 2:19 AM
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that's gay too.
that's gay too.
on some deleted poem
23 Jan 2003, 12:05 AM
still unique but not as good as the other poemes you have posted....7
on Perfect by wordontheverge
23 Jan 2003, 12:09 AM
I like this....fighting the clouds for space... Overall, I like what you're trying to do, but at times it seemed choppy....work on the flow and then it would be in the 9/10 range.....for now 7.
on The darkest woods ever by Shardik
23 Jan 2003, 12:15 AM
the situation you describe is funny, but the sonnet is not working for me. What's darkest ever? Trees with leafs of leather?...odd, the image doesn't work.....6
on some deleted poem
23 Jan 2003, 12:29 AM
Wow, teenage hormones.....just be asexual like me or go and get laid asap....geeez.... You want to take the crown from Christianity, really? What the hell do you even know about religion? It just sounded good so you threw it in, yes.
Inspirational poetry....hmmmmm...I liked where you were going with the clear thought and then you went downhill again......completely eliminate the last stanza....and don't use she...make it from your own prespective.....we find ourselves in a less than perfect circumstance...i barely know you and yet i know what you're about, meaningless creation.
on Curry Gives You The Shits by spank me baby yeah
21 Feb 2003, 7:08 PM
Hence, you should stay away from Indian food.
on some deleted poem
20 Feb 2003, 6:22 PM
haha...perhaps you should rent out some of JBH's gay pornos and learn how to