Re: a comment on Unbroken Horses by Caducus	17-Sep-05/7:55 PM
Not a pretty picture but life can be a bitch sometimes. Some very good lines and I like the narrative form you chose.
Re: Leaving Song by wilco	17-Sep-05/9:52 AM
I can relate. Short but oh so true.
Re: a comment on Leaving Song by wilco	17-Sep-05/9:49 AM
Let's see. 2 plus 1 is only 3. You're still in trouble.
Re: Rapid Eye Movement by wilco	17-Sep-05/9:43 AM
I agree with Dan. "Nothing makes the night so lonely" seems rather awkward. Perhaps, "Nothing mkes the dream alive" Just a thought and a ten by my reckoning.
Re: a comment on Creation by Quarton	16-Sep-05/12:25 PM
zodiac, I believe the big bang or singularity as being the beginning of evolution and resulting in humans over a period of over 13 billion years. I also believe there exist countless other universes spread out over space/time. It seems improbable that ours is the only one.
Re: One Moment to the Other (v3) by nentwined	14-Sep-05/12:49 PM
Excellent. The rhyme is unforced and content profound.
Re: Ack Bassward, or something like that by thepinkbunnyofdoom	30-May-05/8:18 PM
Sorry about the criticism of your poem. I Was in a lousy mood and after reading it again, it does have merit though it would work better if you said more with less.)
Re: Crossing the Mojave by INTRANSIT	25-May-05/4:21 PM
A solid nine. Fascinating!
Re: A Flower for Monet by Shuushin	25-May-05/4:06 PM
Quite simply elegant and I don't impress easily. The best I have read at this site.
Re: a comment on A Child Once More by Quarton	13-Jul-04/11:43 AM
Yes, the rhyme is diffiult and for most, it is best avoided. Frost, Blake and other earlier poets used rhyme almost exclusively but they were in a different league than me. Still, it has a certain appeal if the words are not forced and the meter is evident. Most of the poems I read online use rhyme and are generally quite awful. In fact, I almost always encourage dropping the rhyme in favor of free verse so your suggestions only reinforce what I already know. Yet, I continue to write an occasional rhyming poem even though I know it will probably be rightly criticized. Thanks for the comments.
Re: Are You Experienced? by EAger to Offend	8-Jul-04/12:10 PM
Tho I'm not exactly sure what in hell you are staying, I am sure enough to give this a 9. Interesting!
Re: Battlefield, Girl. by LucidRevelation	8-Jul-04/11:58 AM
Forget the rhyme and try free verse. Also, an economy of words would improve this. Try to say more with less words.
Re: Charter Of Rights by EAger to Offend	8-Jul-04/11:52 AM
I like the message in this piece and agree. One minor nitpick. I would delete the "off" so it would read, "who venture to new worlds for peace."
Re: Ulterior Not Alterior by MacFrantic	8-Jul-04/11:44 AM
Not bad but you should avoid cliches such as "beyond a shadow of a doubt" and "damaged goods" and "universal truths." Oh, also "any way you put it." Be original as much as possible.
Re: a comment on Tapestry Years by Quarton	8-Jul-04/11:30 AM
Are you talking about changing words or deleting them or just changing the punctuation?
Re: a comment on Absolute Truth (about Quarton) by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	6-Jul-04/8:09 PM
And before you get started, I know my little poem only has 4 lines.
Re: a comment on Absolute Truth (about Quarton) by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	6-Jul-04/7:52 PM
and please don't tell me I mispelled "here." I think its time for bed. You guys have worn me out.
Re: Absolute Truth (about Quarton) by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	6-Jul-04/7:48 PM
What can I say but a ten. If I wasn't me, I'd even have a good laugh. (actually, I had one anyway.) I love limericks. Hear is one you might like: There was a young lady from Bright, who traveled much faster than light. She departed one day, in a relative way and arrived on the previous night.
Re: Recycled Stardust by Quarton	6-Jul-04/7:20 PM
I will try one more time in reference to reality and give you another chance to ridicule me. But, this will be my final post on the subject. The basic oneness of the universe is one of the most important revelations of modern physics. At the subatomic particle level, all things are interrelated, interconneted and interdependent. Reality is an abstraction devised by our discriminating and categorizing intellects. To believe our concepts of separate things and events are realities of nature is an illusion, plain and simple. If you don't believe me, then you don't believe in quantum mechanics, period, and all of your arguments have no basis in fact. If you don't know this basic truth, then you should avoid the subject rather than expose your ignorance which so far, has been considerable.
Re: a comment on Recycled Stardust by Quarton	6-Jul-04/2:39 PM
Reality is a human concept. Should humanity cease to exist, so too would reality. And the physical world Has changed and will continue to do so as we expand our knowledge. Our reality today may be rubbish tomorrow and what is left will be the oneness of all that we perceive to be separate. Kinda like the quantum effect where the parts are only manifestations of the whole.