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Ulterior Not Alterior (Free verse) by MacFrantic (Inspired by an argument with my father
that I'm sure many have had before me)
Sharpness spans several degrees
Everything from
Dull to
Acute
But one universal truth remains
That without wit we are nothing
And nothing can be worse
Than damaged goods
In time we learn to avoid people
Who are
Bigger
Stronger
Smarter
Without any hesitation we know
Their weaknesses
But fail to capitalize
Anyway you put it
Everyone has numerous
Character flaws
However I am certain
Beyond a shadow of a doubt
That I am right
And you are nuts
So please stop arguing
Because alterior is not a word
Up the ladder:
The choices we make
Down the ladder:
All About Me
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Posted: July 7, 2004 7:30 PM PDT; Last modified: July 7, 2004 7:30 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.6821256 Overall Rank: 12174 Comments:
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Quarton @ 12.217.221.61
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8-Jul-04/11:44 AM
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Not bad but you should avoid cliches such as "beyond a shadow of a doubt" and "damaged goods" and "universal truths." Oh, also "any way you put it." Be original as much as possible.
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MacFrantic @ 198.81.26.49
> Quarton
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8-Jul-04/12:15 PM
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I'm glad you didn't miss the fact that I use cliches purposefully. But it would be nice if you realized that arguements often dissolve into analogies and familiar "-isms", or cliches. Aversion of these was not my aim.
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