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inadequate (Free verse) by skaskowski let me know if you need dirt,
i'll dig a hole.
let me knew if your shirt is ripped,
i'll learn to sew.
but if you need a hand
to pull you from the facts;
let someone else know,
i'm still learning to adapt.
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From Afar
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Clutch of Eggs
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Posted: February 2, 2006 3:12 AM PST; Last modified: February 2, 2006 3:12 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.6821256 Overall Rank: 12157 Comments:
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Ranger @ 62.252.32.15
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2-Feb-06/9:57 AM
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Well it's not bad, but there's not much more I can say.
Good up to the last line, which kills it.
So your saying his poem "inadequate" is inadequate?
That would be using a poetic-sounding slogan for rhetorical purposes, which is unethical. It would be like saying âRacist, sexist, anti-gay, George Bush go awayâ because the sound of it lends a perception of truth. Or marching in Washington, chanting âThis is what democracy looks like,â then pointing to the Supreme Count while shouting, âThat is what hypocrisy looks like.â Iâm above that.
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