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Charter Of Rights (Free verse) by EAger to Offend
The quest to increase brain blood volume Is illegal in this mental state, The same state where one is not allowed To die of ones own accord, The state of Morality Which chastises the masochists, And the curious, And other individuals Who venture off To new worlds for peace While you remain Committed to Slavery.

Up the ladder: The words of touch
Down the ladder: Dress rehearsal

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.75
Weighted score: 4.8509965
Overall Rank: 10536
Posted: October 1, 2003 1:48 AM PDT; Last modified: October 1, 2003 1:48 AM PDT
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[8] Quarton @ 12.217.221.61 | 8-Jul-04/11:52 AM | Reply
I like the message in this piece and agree. One minor nitpick. I would delete the "off" so it would read, "who venture to new worlds for peace."
[4] Edna Sweetlove @ 85.210.13.138 | 21-Jun-06/3:42 AM | Reply
Obscure and unclear.
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