regarding some deleted poem...	4-Dec-02/8:28 PM
Good use of metaphor and well written. My nit is the last stanza, in particular, the first three words.<br><br> But even could we catch the song receding,<br>the wind casts echoes high, then drops<br>them, ripplng, through our dreams.....Perhaps: Though could we catch the song receding,<br>winds cast echoes high, then drops them;<br>rippling, through our dreams.
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Dec-02/11:37 AM
Another possibility: "Yet, should we capture the waning song..." Or perhaps "its refrain waning" and : "the fading song..." or "the dying song..." I hope this helps:)
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Dec-02/6:20 PM
Very descriptive and very original piece. A narrative type poem that I enjoyed a lot. The last stanza is perfect and I am impressed by your imagery. All in all, a very good poem.
Re: Glassblowers by Christof	5-Dec-02/6:24 PM
Really liked this one. Short and meaningful with great rhythm. One typo, "gawp" should be "gawk."
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Dec-02/9:31 PM
This is terrific writing. Great rhythm and rhyme. I wouldn't change a thing. To you, sir, goes my first ten.
Re: Shackles of Reality by rick	19-Dec-02/2:26 PM
rick, I liked this a lot. Good metaphor and imagery to enhance the poems content. Almost great but still worthy of an eight.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Dec-02/2:43 PM
Tintagiles, Quite a production you have here. It needs to be shortened a bit and would be stronger by eliminating needless words. Also, the old English language in somewhat inconsistent. Example: "Be silent you. I have not come here to hear you babble..." How about: "I have not come "hither" to hear you babble..." Still, you kept my interest to the end and with a little work, you have the makings of a very good poem. And remember this about most good poetry...an economy of words works best so edit and edit again and again, cutting out the fat until your piece is lean and to the point.
Re: Endymion Dead by vulcan	19-Dec-02/2:45 PM
Very nice. No fat and well written. I enjoyed!
Re: of people and places (final cut)I by INTRANSIT	19-Dec-02/6:26 PM
Very zen-like in meaning. The whole is infinitely more than the sum of its parts and I assign you a nine. Good Stuff!!
Re: Little Johnie's Jihad by <{Baba^Yaga}>	26-Dec-02/8:50 AM
An excellent and thought-provoking piece. Poor Little Johnny; poor brainwashed Little Johnny. Should someone tell him his seven virgins were all fucked by Bin Laden? And that Allah is really pissed. Not enough body bags filled with the bloody remains of innocent Jewish children. Allah Akbar indeed! A nine by my reckoning.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Dec-02/9:01 AM
Interesting but hard to really define your intent or meaning. Perhaps expound a bit more though OK as is. I do like narrative poetry and this is a seven. And please,.... don't tell me you didn't inhale.
Re: The spleenless poet by Bachus	30-Dec-02/4:52 PM
Well, you have certainly written an original poem though, after reading it twice, I am unsure as to your intent and meaning. It is an interesting poem and I will wait until I have time to read it again before giving it a rating.
Re: Missing You by psychedelic	4-Jan-03/8:07 AM
Nice. I like the simplicity and the metaphors.
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Jan-03/8:15 AM
This is a narrative type poem and I enjoyed the read. Some excellent lines and written in simple and appealing language. It could be tightened a bit but overall, well done.
Re: untitled2 by ThreeFourSix	4-Jan-03/8:19 AM
Short and sweet. Kind of like something Ogden Nash would write. If you haven't read him, check it out.
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Jan-03/7:18 PM
Whew...that's a relief!!!
Re: Multiplicity the Hallucination by vulcan	9-Jan-03/11:17 AM
Hi, vulcan Been meaning to read more of your "stuff" and I hope it is all as good as this one. Loved the way you tied it all together in the last stanza. It made me think which I like a poem to do. Very impressive with great imagery and meaning. I give it a nine though I think a ten is not out of line. Oh...just what does a crocodile taste like? I do know they are edible and I'm sure the croc views us the same way:)
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Jan-03/11:25 AM
So sad but well said. In places, it borders on the melancholy but overall, a very absorbing and vivid piece. Deserves a high number.
Re: Winter's Cabin by powerline	9-Jan-03/12:55 PM
Not sure this should be stretched. Very original and interesting content. I very much enjoy poems that turn the mundane into the meaningful. Good job!
Re: Tingling by INTRANSIT	9-Jan-03/1:05 PM
Well done. This rates a high number as it turns an ordinary day into a piece of art. Psst..I like the *PIFF*