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untitled2 (Free verse) by ThreeFourSix a lust for all,
is a must for some,
and when lust is must,
the trust is none.
Up the ladder:
Imagine
Down the ladder:
Who Flamed Roger Rabbit?
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Posted: October 27, 2002 4:37 PM PST; Last modified: October 27, 2002 4:40 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.5005374 Overall Rank: 12798 Comments:
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27-Oct-02/6:07 PM
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nice observation
not clever enough to work. Unless one "gets it" as soon as they read it, you can assume you haven't been clear enough. Why not "and when lust is a must / trust turns to dust"? Granted it's a bit of a cliche but it's a silly poem.
i kinda wanted "some" and "none" to rhyme, which they do. but yeah its just a silly poem.
thanks for your feedback!
Short and sweet. Kind of like something Ogden Nash would write.
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