Re: a comment on requiem for an ex-girlfriend by natalie	21-Oct-02/8:41 PM
Creative writing grad students make me nauseous. Every time I talk to one or hear one read, I seriously consider throwing away my pens and notebooks and never writing again.
Re: a comment on My Friend? by Blade	21-Oct-02/6:25 PM
Wonderful. You have no idea how painful it can get trapped in a one room schoolhouse with 20 people who make our friend maria look like an inspired authoress. I find myself thinking about how quickly all of that old wood would burn...
Re: a comment on My Friend? by Blade	21-Oct-02/6:20 PM
So when is it you're coming home?
Re: a comment on My Friend? by Blade	21-Oct-02/5:58 PM
Of course I know, dearest. I was more hoping it was an ironic statement because I don't like to believe people are that stupid, even when the evidence is right before my eyes.
Re: My Friend? by Blade	21-Oct-02/5:40 PM
Is the bad spelling an ironic statement on everyone's comments against Maria's spelling, or are you just illiterate?
Re: love by little_angel_maria	21-Oct-02/4:47 PM
Don't they teach grammar in the schools in England?
Re: Love by little_angel_maria	20-Oct-02/8:01 PM
Waste. Not waist. His love won't come back. He probably isn't worth it either. Don't you value yourself enough to live without him?
Re: a comment on On a chill morning by razorgrin	17-Oct-02/5:31 PM
But you mention so many outside things EXCEPT that. I fyou didn't get into such detail about your window, leaving the house, it would make sense. It's inconsistent with the rest of what you've said. As for throwing rocks at my window... have fun! The chances I'd hear you? Good. The chances I'd care? Slim to nil. You'd get bored first. Or I'd just invite you in for Schnapps...
Re: You Can by Dariana	17-Oct-02/5:28 PM
I only just read this and I'd almost call it plagiarism. It's like borrowing someone else's essay, then changing the words to make it your own. Climb every mountain.
Re: a comment on You Can by Dariana	17-Oct-02/5:26 PM
I was actually about to call her on that one as well. It's a known fact that you despise that deliciously sappy stuff, and I adore it.
Re: Girlz by liljsmith87	16-Oct-02/5:21 PM
There are these two girls and I love them more than anything They have everything I want And nothing but them is anymore important to me But there of course are some problems Ones that are not easy to fix I try my best to solve them But of course I can't get rid of the pricks let alone this one bitch Who, used to be my friend Until she got pissed Made one mistake And she put me on "THE LIST" So now Angie isn't my friend All because I went wrong Terryn made my life miserable Wished at first I didnt belong But then I look at the good side Happy the other girl I love is still my friend And try to make sure This friendship won't end. (I took the liberty of correcting your spelling)
Re: a comment on On a chill morning by razorgrin	16-Oct-02/1:44 PM
I think I've got to agree with Tintagiles, bunny. It's like a gaping hole in the continuity of the piece. There's no transition and the reader finds herself wondering, "Does your sidewalk drive?"
Re: Irony by w~* ATHENA *~w	12-Oct-02/8:39 PM
Uhh... I could just be overtired but... where's the irony?
Re: Poem #5 (of a series of poems for Boo) by Owner of the Sky	12-Oct-02/2:47 PM
I like this, it's very refreshing.
Re: Shut Out by joho117	12-Oct-02/1:20 PM
Have you ever heard a song called "Don't You Want Me Anymore?" by Pulp? It's the same idea, better expressed. Shouldn't it be, "you love me no longer". how much does it hurt you? This is just a statement of fact. Describe your feelings.
Re: Wednesday's Breaking by poetandknowit	12-Oct-02/1:13 PM
The first stanza doesn't have the power of the second. The birdsongs, the house dog, the roommate are distant from the scene not in that they're not involved with the scene, but in that they don't seem real at all. To me, the way you present them makes them completely lifeless and irrelevant to the action. I would work on everything before "will wrestle from" Why "dead shape"?
Re: a comment on tears beyond hope by Mystifying	6-Oct-02/10:17 AM
On the contrary, I think spelling is really important. No matter how good and powerful the spirit of a piece might be, it will get significantly less respect if it is full of spelling mistakes.
Re: A Sign on a Giant Donut at a Twenty Four Hour a Day Donut Shop Overlooking Pacific Coast Highway in Sunset Beach California at Eight in the Evening on September Twenty Fourth Two-Thousand and Two by Dark Angle	4-Oct-02/9:36 PM
Hehehe... I love it!
Re: The Seagull Reader by SpiffyDoo	4-Oct-02/9:33 PM
Good Lord... You wouldn't have had to endure a creative writing class at UNB, would you? I like it though. I can't imagine a better piece describing the Seagull.
Re: I'll Always Remember by NobodyGirl9	4-Oct-02/9:30 PM
The only word I can think of to describe this poem is "corny". Try adding some imagery. I'm not usually one to stand up and declaim about what poetry is, but this is prose. The two things that this piece has that might make it a poem are the rhymes, and the fact that it is broken up into stanzas. Still, because it is so severely lacking in artistry, I must label it prose. Get yourself a weblog and post this as a diary entry.