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requiem for an ex-girlfriend

by natalie

Member since 2002 · Posted 21 Oct 2002 · 8 comments

-do you remember Julie? my roomate asked. deja vu jealousy filled my mouth. she had been younger than me, kept her virginity past freshman year, chastity belted bitch who stole my boy. her utter goodness making her a hot commodity back in college, when in my eyes love meant he snuck into my room at night to meet me in my bed. -she's dead, cancer. she continued. the facts ripped my stomach open, the immortal juices of the young rushed out tearing me mortal, making me adult and guilty. because cancer was only real for old people who'd smoked all their lives. because now she would always be younger than me, as if she could have caught up.

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[6] Tintagiles 21-Oct-02/6:50 PM Reply
OH MY GOD!!! Another student!!! Will Blabbitt survive? I find it needs work, especially from 'because cancer was' onwards.
[n/a] poetandknowit › Tintagiles 21-Oct-02/6:58 PM Reply
Grad students rock!
[n/a] limonade › poetandknowit 21-Oct-02/8:41 PM Reply
Creative writing grad students make me nauseous. Every time I talk to one or hear one read, I seriously consider throwing away my pens and notebooks and never writing again.
[n/a] poetandknowit › limonade 21-Oct-02/8:48 PM Reply
She is not a creative writing grad student is she. I know quite a few literary sorts that carry a grand MFA. Unfortunately, I am not one. And I do not teach in the English disciplines. And put your website back up. It was on my list of things to do one day. Does it have more of your writing than you post here.
[8] Christof 22-Oct-02/1:15 AM Reply
I like th fact that the jealousy is still the most prevalent emotion, even at the end. But it's mixed in with shick, guilt and regret as well. That's a lot to cover in a short space.
[7] cleverdevice 22-Oct-02/5:10 AM Reply
Wow. Very haunting actually. Really makes you think amout your mortality.
[8] god'swife 22-Oct-02/10:56 AM Reply
Very fine, the ending is strong, I like that.
[9] Bachus 19-Dec-02/1:52 PM Reply
brilliant.