| Re: you by diamondeyez |
28-Nov-02/1:51 AM |
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Try coming from a different angle when writing of love, love is indefinable, everyone has different defintions, delve deep whats yours? let me taste from your creative cauldron
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28-Nov-02/5:16 AM |
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Its Different from the usual *6*
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| Re: Longing by deadstar |
28-Nov-02/8:10 AM |
Simple poem of angst, nothing wrong with being simple my girl tells me (thats why shes with me).
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| Re: Pleas Dont.. by MysticalRaven88 |
28-Nov-02/8:20 AM |
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Kind of 'supermarket poetry' with the wrong price tag on it
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| Re: Friend by MysticalRaven88 |
28-Nov-02/8:38 AM |
America gave us Baywatch !
It also gave us David Hasselhoff !
America gave us Star Trek
America gave us a fascinting insight on how to bury a cigar,
America gave us Cowboys
America gave us Hawaii five o and Magnum.
Thank God almighty real or not for giving us a big fuckoff ocean to seperate us,
hey guys who fucking cares theirs only 1 American I gotta problem with and he thinks Macedonias a fucking dance at a wedding.
rest, deep breath, Think of John Lennon, and congratulate each other on breaking the 'Guiness book of records' for the most comments on any poetry website ( hey if thats true melinda 50/50s fair huh?
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| Re: The Yule tide log by ==Doylum |
28-Nov-02/8:43 AM |
My mum wants to know what your doing tonight?
She then wants to papercut you to death with a copy of this, (if she can get up off her fat ass that is)
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28-Nov-02/9:01 AM |
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As usual brilliant and its not even your best =====8======
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| Re: It's All 'Cause I Love You by Tigger8023 |
28-Nov-02/9:34 AM |
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cheesy but harmless i guess
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28-Nov-02/9:36 AM |
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| Re: Clive Barker's penis pump by horus8 |
29-Nov-02/3:51 AM |
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horus, your a hellraiser, wonder if clive barkers got pins on his head (ouch), see the title might just work
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| Re: Clive Barker's penis pump by horus8 |
29-Nov-02/3:52 AM |
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how rude of me heres a slinky number for you *7*
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
29-Nov-02/4:57 AM |
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heres a 0 you sick fuck, for desecrating the memory of my dad and for being so immature to vote it 1/10 because your own poetry is so shit.
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29-Nov-02/5:25 AM |
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Imaginative ! I wish I could do Haiku *9*
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| Re: No One Cares by Quarton |
29-Nov-02/8:20 AM |
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| Re: Hold Tight by casey |
29-Nov-02/8:40 AM |
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A moving eulogy, stanza 4 needs more connection, thought the ending was very true to life, work with it; see what you can do -6-
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| Re: Sociology of Deviance by blackball |
29-Nov-02/9:15 AM |
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Sod the dissection on the poem, i liked its vibe,and it gave me 20 seconds of entertainment so heres a 7 to jail.
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| Re: love song by <~> |
29-Nov-02/9:21 AM |
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2-Dec-02/12:43 AM |
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Not as structured and resolute but still a vivid and interesting read, this still harbours passsion and your work always has a lascivious vibe, this could be better if the message was repeated rather like a chorus between each stanza, the message being power.
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2-Dec-02/4:42 AM |
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This would make the lady in the lake wet, very good, more of a short story than a poem. *8*
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| Re: Afraid by LovePoet |
2-Dec-02/4:51 AM |
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The text doewsnt justify the title enough, I had no empathy for the character. Try and tell a story less predictably, give us the fear, make it more tangible, as it stands it leaves me barren of any feeling or reaction, go for it keep on trying. (will vote on a re edit)
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