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Sociology of Deviance

Member since 2002 · Posted 28 Nov 2002 · 11 comments

Your blackened hand fell closer to me in the exhaustion of screaming...i wanted to go home shattered glass all around the road ravelling on beyond the rain soaked sun the song in my mind was left screaming back to the beginning of time then the fireglow you put it out

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[n/a] Bill Z Bub 28-Nov-02/3:39 PM Reply

Really like the ending.
But I'm not sure what its about.

[n/a] blackball › Bill Z Bub 29-Nov-02/1:39 AM Reply

hell...me neither

[9] razorgrin 28-Nov-02/4:31 PM Reply

cool.

[7] deleted user 29-Nov-02/1:22 AM Reply

Nice imagery

[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 29-Nov-02/1:38 AM Reply

if you take out the last sentence..you have a gold mine..congradulations. happy thanksgiving. 10.

[n/a] blackball › <{Baba^Yaga}> 29-Nov-02/1:39 AM Reply

i dunno...i think it brings conclusion to the whole image

[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 29-Nov-02/1:44 AM Reply

yeah, but it's redundant..when it comes to sharp intuitive skills, so.. we already know. if you know what i mean .or rather that's what we're hoping for.. maybe add..and took your sweet time..to it? i gave you ten..what the fuck? it just left me a tinge underdone..not that medium rare isn't great sometimes.

[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 29-Nov-02/1:45 AM Reply

it's about the exhaustion of love, and the price that comes with it.

[n/a] blackball › <{Baba^Yaga}> 29-Nov-02/1:47 AM Reply

you think? i thought it was more about a car crash...but yeah now that i read it over i either should have left that last line out or added something to it.

[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 29-Nov-02/1:50 AM Reply

and the image is ended in the last two lines of the stanza by the way, that's why subconsciously you seperated the last two sentences from themselves and the stanza...you might still be a little two close to the piece to recognize that though right now so...no biggy..goodbye.

[7] Caducus 29-Nov-02/9:15 AM Reply

Sod the dissection on the poem, i liked its vibe,and it gave me 20 seconds of entertainment so heres a 7 to jail.