Liked the vibe in this ..8
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A sweet poem, I liked where you went with stanza 1 felt I was there for a minute. The last 4 lines are almost redundant, so you need the heaven bit? otherwise it scrapes an 8 well done

First off let me say I liked this, the message was sincere and its nice to see a heartfelt rather than academic way of writing about what you did.
However it does read more like a newspaper column than a poem, the last 3 lines have no happily ever after and you have achieved what you set out to do making me reflect on the flaws of human nature. **********8********

Nicely done your a superhero of the decriptive. Please oblige me with perusing my work sometime, 'Carry On Nicholas' I can hear the cacle of Sid James in 'Hinnom'. -9-

This will be the wall paper for my bedroom i have printed 1157 copies and my room looks fantastic.
The last line was ideal for the pipe gap under the radiators. I would guess bobjim is a casanova in bed if he is this patient at hand typing he has a lot to offer women everywhere, so i am giving you the Don Juan Da Marco award for home improvements and bedroom skills, genius, can't wait to see the sequel will it be called 'off'

if you stand back 10 yards, after a few vodka's I swear you can see a concrete masterpiece of 2 lovers going at it like rabbits on viagra

I dont think this could bore hardly anyone unless they are tin men on a yellow brick road. Its a bit thin in parts but overall a good read, fairly forgettable but if someone wrote it for me I would be moved, but alas noone does, seen far worse than this so se7en

I'm cracking up i read your poem and thought exactly what gods wife said, so did you? you smoothie you. By the way this is quite beautiful it enchanted me, you have many sides to your die and most are sixes -9-

Awesome poem it reeks of grief and your perception of the world, the irony, the injustified fate of life, the weakness of mortality and the decadence of frustration, sarcasm, boredom, the ending is a crescendo of turmoil- I fucking loved this have a 9, i am off to pound my head against a corkscrew listening to 'everbody hurts'

Makes me think of a depeche mode song, 'and i dont want to start any blasphemous rumours but i think that god has a sick sense of humour and when i die i expect to find him laughing' -liked the end of this and the ideas behind it, you have your own little world full of overpopulated thoughts - cool -8

boring compared to the other 2 i just commented on, but then i again i dont really get it. -5-

liked the 'carry on' film references to your ideas of the 2 types of people, and you wove the end quite nicely, not really my shot of vodka but still liked downing it in one. Your work is always polished i'll give you that Mr J. *8*

Outstanding, your my favourite poet on this site, wild, evocative and exciting. I could see you even writing stage plays your original with a twist of tim Burton, If you succeed in poetry - poetry succeeds as an art thats the highest compliment I have paid on this site and I wish you all the frankincense and myrr $$$$$ you can get. (10)

Needed a light read

Quite an interesting read to see the perpetrators affect on the perpetrated, an honest piece told straightforwardly -7-

Your seminal work I was captivated and in my opinion deserving of a top 15 place ...easy, well done you have my maximum respect. *10*

Very polished, I too love the skyline (literally)

Pro !

Thats how marketing should be done. Horus I cannot access your frames on your site, I can see your brandoesque eyes but whats a goin on a here?

Wow