| Re: Math Poem 2 by Dovina |
26-Dec-04/5:50 PM |
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| Re: My Wife by Dovina |
30-Dec-04/9:03 AM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
31-Dec-04/8:37 AM |
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I can't help it. I'm a fan of fins. -10-
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| Re: Math Poem 3 by Dovina |
2-Jan-05/7:19 AM |
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I'm sorry, Miss Dovina. The dog ate my math homework.
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| Re: Poetic Profit by Dovina |
3-Jan-05/8:13 PM |
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Hey, I like this guy. He and I could sing a couple of good old country songs togther. "He Stopped Loving Her Today," "Didn't Know God Made Honky Tonk Angels" and the like. Was he drinking an American Brew? I prefer a dark beer myself with plenty of salty nuts.
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| Re: What I Do Know by PsydewaysTears |
3-Jan-05/8:17 PM |
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Ah! There's nothing like getting your little head to pop one off first thing in the morning to let you know you're still alive.
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3-Jan-05/8:24 PM |
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I love the last line's planned ambiguity. I agree. Who the hell needs them? Good poem. Aisle ketch U laider.
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| Re: Ode To Sweet Susie Chee by Bachus |
4-Jan-05/7:45 AM |
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| Re: Cigarettes and Masturbation by Lifeboatman |
4-Jan-05/7:53 AM |
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Listen to the Surgeon and take your Zantac 75.
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| Re: Dying In The Corner by Zalev |
4-Jan-05/7:57 AM |
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| Re: Uncertainty by nentwined |
4-Jan-05/8:47 AM |
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Man, you are in dire need of a tea party. Great!
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4-Jan-05/7:09 PM |
Golly, S. It's been so long since I've had the option of choosing sides that I sleep wherever I happen to pass out from the booze (floor, couch, computer desk or the usual-- bathroom). I mean, if I have to choose something, I'll choose top over bottom 8 nights a week. Good read -9- I'm a fan of bedtime.
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| Re: The Way by Dovina |
6-Jan-05/7:12 PM |
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Is this kinda like, "I found it in the last place I would a thought to look for it?" I think it's kinda clever in very unbelievable way.
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| Re: The Saddest Part by MacFrantic |
6-Jan-05/7:20 PM |
I like this
and that's the saddest part.
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6-Jan-05/7:25 PM |
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Cool idea. I can't get past the 'will' in 8th line. I think it would flow better without it. Even so, at least a -9-.
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| Re: Ghostly Rememberance by Beyond_Dreams |
6-Jan-05/7:28 PM |
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Yep. They can really shove your meat into the freezer when it suits 'em. -8-
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7-Jan-05/8:29 AM |
I see the problem uphill/will (2 beats/1 beat)
then now/allow (1 beat/2 beats). I guess it has to do with the stresses.
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| Re: Peptalk in the Dugout by Dovina |
12-Jan-05/11:13 PM |
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-10- The 'preverts' in line 13 is sheer genius. The only improvement I would add might be to change the last word from ball to balls.
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| Re: Goldmunds Slut Fiasco. by SupremeDreamer |
15-Jan-05/11:37 AM |
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A verbal Degas in his late period. Quite withering.
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| Re: Rendered Genderless by PsydewaysTears |
16-Jan-05/10:19 AM |
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Overstated but real as a cheeseburger and a milkshake-9-.
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