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What I Do Know (Free verse) by PsydewaysTears
I woke up Out of a sound sleep To make sure I still had all of my fingers. I don't know if that means I'm crazy Or just extra careful. I dug through To the bottom of the garbage can To make sure the wasp I had swatted was still dead. I don't know if that means I'm psychotic Or just a little paranoid. I videotaped Myself sleep for five hours To make sure I didn't cease to exist during the night. I don't know if that means I'm deranged Or just deeply disciplined. I asked my History teacher if the past ACTUALLY happened To make sure the world wasn't just playing some prank on me. I don't know if that means I'm an idiot Or just a bit intimidated. I rung my hands Around my neck and squeezed until my head popped off To make sure I didn't let somebody else get the best of me. I don't know if that means that I'm erratic..... But I do know that you don't know either.

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Posted: January 3, 2005 11:28 AM PST; Last modified: January 3, 2005 11:28 AM PST
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[9] Dan garcia-Black @ | 3-Jan-05/8:17 PM | Reply
Ah! There's nothing like getting your little head to pop one off first thing in the morning to let you know you're still alive.
[n/a] PsydewaysTears @ > Dan garcia-Black | 3-Jan-05/9:15 PM | Reply
I dunno... I personally prefer a good popping-off of my head while the night is still young. But then again I've always been somewhat of a night owl so I'm sort of predisposed to thinking that.

•°•Gregory James•°•
[8] justjay @ | 4-Jan-05/9:37 PM | Reply
it seems like a little to much of a "journal entry" type of poem. i really do like the question type of finish to each stanza. something i never did but really like the sound to it. you also throw exactly how you feel into writting. something i tend to stay away from but it helps the reader see the situation. thanks for commenting on my poem by the way.
[n/a] PsydewaysTears @ > justjay | 4-Jan-05/11:43 PM | Reply
I know what you mean. My "exact feelings" usually only muster up when I'm attempting free verse (I'm not so great at it yet). I'm more of a form writer at heart so whenever I mosey into free verse I tend to say both too much and too little (and it turns out journal-entry-ish). Thanks for the comment and rating!

•°•Gregory James •°•
[8] Bhaskaryya @ | 5-Jan-05/9:56 AM | Reply
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