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What I Do Know (Free verse) by PsydewaysTears

I woke up Out of a sound sleep To make sure I still had all of my fingers. I don't know if that means I'm crazy Or just extra careful. I dug through To the bottom of the garbage can To make sure the wasp I had swatted was still dead. I don't know if that means I'm psychotic Or just a little paranoid. I videotaped Myself sleep for five hours To make sure I didn't cease to exist during the night. I don't know if that means I'm deranged Or just deeply disciplined. I asked my History teacher if the past ACTUALLY happened To make sure the world wasn't just playing some prank on me. I don't know if that means I'm an idiot Or just a bit intimidated. I rung my hands Around my neck and squeezed until my head popped off To make sure I didn't let somebody else get the best of me. I don't know if that means that I'm erratic..... But I do know that you don't know either.

justjay 4-Jan-05/9:37 PM
it seems like a little to much of a "journal entry" type of poem. i really do like the question type of finish to each stanza. something i never did but really like the sound to it. you also throw exactly how you feel into writting. something i tend to stay away from but it helps the reader see the situation. thanks for commenting on my poem by the way.

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