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Math Poem 2 (Free verse) by Dovina
A city of ones, loosely connected, never satisfied, until one and another one united as one flesh. Soon, they felt not just as ones, but a new thing too, and they called the new thing two— 1 + 1 = 2. The Reverend George Boole found the ones proclaiming two and declared them not a new thing, for theirs was no addition. No, he said, they had committed AND, become a logical one, the same sort of one each of them had been before, 1 AND 1 = 1 or stated liturgically, 1 • 1 = 1. But the ones mocked the Reverend, for thinking ones could so unite as to become another one. So they lived as two, remembering the ones they were and still were— 2 = 1 + 1.

Up the ladder: untitled
Down the ladder: Alone Together

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.4
Weighted score: 5.286087
Overall Rank: 3737
Posted: December 25, 2004 11:24 AM PST; Last modified: December 30, 2004 2:57 PM PST
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Comments:
[8] PsydewaysTears @ 69.240.74.35 | 25-Dec-04/1:19 PM | Reply
cute.
[10] jroday @ 204.215.33.64 | 25-Dec-04/6:35 PM | Reply
As my son says to me sometimes that's down -10- Felicia
[9] Dan garcia-Black @ 67.122.15.3 | 26-Dec-04/5:50 PM | Reply
cuter
[9] Dan garcia-Black @ 67.122.15.195 > Dan garcia-Black | 30-Dec-04/7:28 PM | Reply
It's even more cuter as Math 2.
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 > Dan garcia-Black | 30-Dec-04/8:09 PM | Reply
Wow, that's inspiring! I'm pressing on for cutest of the more cuter!
[9] Dan garcia-Black @ 66.218.59.79 > Dovina | 31-Dec-04/8:31 AM | Reply
Will there be a Math Poem 3? I can hardly wait to find out if 3=1+1+1 or if 3=cute+more cuter+most cutest.
Actually, the only math I understand is the bills and paycheck in my hand=0.
I'm going to pawn my bass today so I can buy a bottle of Andre's Champagne for tonight's midnight toast. Happy New Year!!!
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 > Dan garcia-Black | 31-Dec-04/8:35 AM | Reply
Please return later today for the exciting continuation of math poems. Number 3 will astound you! Happy New Year!
[8] richa @ 81.178.233.69 | 28-Dec-04/7:49 AM | Reply
Much better. The start is a bit weak, I would say if you want to write a maths poem use mathematical terms to give the poem better precision. 'Bumping about in randomness' and 'loosely connected', are too vague. They turn the reader off immediately. Other than that there is a more obvious natural progression in this poem than the previous one.
[8] richa @ 81.178.233.69 > richa | 29-Dec-04/7:53 AM | Reply
also it needs to be more poetic. This is virtually prose, and undisciplined sprawling 1000 words an hour prose at that.
[8] richa @ 81.178.233.69 > richa | 29-Dec-04/7:54 AM | Reply
and i know a mathematician that can show that a married woman and a married man are one and not two.
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 > richa | 29-Dec-04/10:29 AM | Reply
I would like to see that poem.
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.153.196.50 | 28-Dec-04/9:01 AM | Reply
What the hell are you talking about? This is just shit. Mathematically, this poeme is uninteresting. Unless you're fascinated by the fact that not all operators are identical. Poetically, all you've done is sprawl out this observation in a stupid, non-rhyming, tedious blanket of guff.
[n/a] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.130.62.63 | 28-Dec-04/6:12 PM | Reply
jesus H. Christ.
[n/a] auscot @ 138.130.95.21 | 28-Dec-04/8:52 PM | Reply
This poem is disingenuous, is it some sort of avant garde
form of writing to scare off readers and give poetry a bad name? Please, let's make poetry readable and enjoyable.
[n/a] zodiac @ 212.118.14.17 | 29-Dec-04/4:09 AM | Reply
Balls.
[8] patty t @ 64.231.23.109 | 2-Jan-05/6:44 PM | Reply
the 'too'/'two' pun is telegraphed - saw it coming a mile away. -8-
[n/a] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 > patty t | 3-Jan-05/2:05 PM | Reply
Couldn’t resist. I must knuckle down and become less cheesy.
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