Re: Fastso by Dovina	6-Mar-05/9:41 PM
Must U rite such gay poems allathe time? Do you know that they make lipstick out of suet? "suety gang..."
Re: eat what you want. by burgerking33	9-Mar-05/5:02 AM
Nice, tight, little rant. Good diet, too. If you shove all that stuff up your... It never gets into your blood stream to clog your arteries.
Re: Sauvignon by Dovina	12-Mar-05/5:26 PM
2buckchuck&awinesnob. This is a lovely cock-tale of deceit.-10-
Re: JJ’s Church by Dovina	16-Mar-05/8:10 AM
I'll never go to another steakhouse bar and feel secular again. JJ's Steakhouse Church is a holey (sic) place
Re: The Glass by dancin_n_da_moonlite	16-Mar-05/8:16 AM
We all see the world through glass. I see it through the glass of a wine bottle. Sometimes I see the world through the glass of the Cathode Ray Tube. Glass is(at least)obvious where our own prejudices and cultural filters are not.
Re: Death is a Three Step Process by dancin_n_da_moonlite	16-Mar-05/8:19 AM
Good work on an easy form made difficult (and better}.
Re: Thinking by dancin_n_da_moonlite	16-Mar-05/8:22 AM
You are. Maybe that will be enough. If I were writing this one I would have screwed it up at the end with some trite comment about someone passing the joint or bottle over to me. Good thing you wrote it instead.
Re: Clouds by dancin_n_da_moonlite	17-Mar-05/8:22 AM
This style of creating a mood followed by quick jab of insight at the end is very enjoyable. "I like the clouds. I want my head, in the clouds, My job is..." Would make you sound more certain of your conclusion but might ruin the mood. -10- is in the clouds.
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Mar-05/8:32 AM
I have a poem that comes from lights called "Star Bright." Your poem is about the beauty of the lights.It's the opposite mine. I enjoyed your conclusion much more than mine. Shuushin is ussually "right on" in his comments. But if it is the use of the word beauty that is bothersome, I don't understand. I see "beauty-beautiful" used only twice. Have you edited this work since the comment was made?
Re: Reasonably Good by Dovina	22-Mar-05/7:55 AM
Let's not get personal here. I was born the year of the Rat. There is no year of the dove only the Cock. Which will you extol?
Re: The Symbol by Dovina	24-Mar-05/7:16 PM
"Skull & Cross Bon Mots"
Re: Make Music in Your Heart by Dovina	28-Mar-05/11:10 AM
"if in your heart a melody sings and you the one in debt and part of the reason I write now" Good thought but the tiniest editing on these lines would help the flow. -9- for now.
Re: Middle-Aged White Woman by Dovina	8-Apr-05/4:07 PM
It's good but I want ten acres and a mule before I'll let myself forget what "you people" did to those people
Re: Moments (or) Suicide by Dovina	8-Apr-05/4:11 PM
Are grading your life on strict percentages or are you willing to use a curve?
Re: Racism by Dovina	1-May-05/11:22 AM
Good use of racism, Dovina.
Re: To Making Do by Dovina	22-May-05/11:03 AM
A lot of talking to yourself on this one, Dovina. Is that a sign of a sound mind? It seems a bit of a "brag." Maybe I just envy you your last stanza. My poem would end in opposite tone. -8- For lording your freedom over an oppressed mass--Me.
regarding some deleted poem...	23-May-05/8:03 AM
Cha, Che or chai? If it's about chai, line thirteen should read, "No man died or went pour..."
Re: Swoon by Dovina	24-May-05/8:40 AM
Quite a departure from your usual style.
Re: Kerri & Terri by jessicazee	24-May-05/8:50 AM
Ah...nostalgia! Pass the catsup and don't forget to bring in the wash off the line after dinner.
regarding some deleted poem...	24-May-05/8:54 AM
Vouldn't a band-aid have vorked as vell, Count?