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Sauvignon (Free verse) by Dovina
Try my L’orangerie Ninety-Four I’ve saved it for this special night Loire Valley southwest of Paris and tell me how it feels So he raised a glass swirled expertly inspected legs inserted his member sensing bouquet “Full-bodied, fine” he said “You’ve a French sensibility” “Thank you,” I sighed breathing heavily He tasted, smiled bid me drink ahead a gentleman to be sure When we’d drunk our fill and said goodnight I returned bottle to rack brought from hiding the empty Two-Buck-Chuck and put it in the trash

Up the ladder: Internet Junkie
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Overall Rank: 3436
Posted: March 12, 2005 10:40 AM PST; Last modified: March 12, 2005 10:40 AM PST
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[10] Dan garcia-Black @ 208.57.91.57 | 12-Mar-05/5:26 PM | Reply
2buckchuck&awinesnob. This is a lovely cock-tale of deceit.-10-
[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.12.111 > Dan garcia-Black | 13-Mar-05/6:35 AM | Reply
When deceived, deceive. And eye for an eye. But it’s fantasy really - getting even. Might as well laugh and write a poem.
[6] zodiac @ 212.118.11.13 | 12-Mar-05/10:45 PM | Reply
Have you ever drunk a bottle of wine costing more than, oh, $10?

This is not poetry. It's a bad idea on its last legs.
[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.12.111 > zodiac | 13-Mar-05/6:37 AM | Reply
Very funny pun - legs. hahahaha hahahahaha hahahahaha
[6] zodiac @ 212.118.11.13 > Dovina | 14-Mar-05/9:21 PM | Reply
Why don't you answer my question?
[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.2.254 > zodiac | 15-Mar-05/7:02 AM | Reply
Yes
[6] zodiac @ 212.118.11.13 > Dovina | 16-Mar-05/9:20 PM | Reply
Could you honestly not tell the difference between it and the two-dollar wine? Call me clothesminded, but it strikes me that for a metaphor to work, the real-world thing it's referencing (in this case, the actual wine,) has to work. I'd be hard-pressed to name someone (even among the Islams here) who couldn't tell the difference between $2 and $10 bottles of wine.
[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.5.123 > zodiac | 17-Mar-05/8:09 AM | Reply
Whether I could tell the difference is not even addressed in the poem, nor does it make any difference.
[6] zodiac @ 212.118.19.192 > Dovina | 18-Mar-05/9:50 PM | Reply
Sorry. I'll rephrase: Do you personally know someone who would both
a) claim to be knowledgeable about wines, and
b) mistake a $2 bottle of wine for some aged French Sauvignon?

Of course, that's not the point. The point is it's a metaphor for guys who are dogs, didn't I see the whole inserting his member bit, wasn't that clever? No, it wasn't particularly. And no, for a metaphor to work it's GOT TO WORK IN REAL LIFE (ie, wine) before working in metaphorland (ie, sex). Otherwise I could just write a poem about how my rugged good looks are a metaphor for my winning personality.

Anyway, answer the question for a dinar. I know you think it's some clever word-trap, so I'll go first: No, I don't know anybody who would do both of those things.
[n/a] Dovina @ 12.72.10.10 > zodiac | 19-Mar-05/6:50 AM | Reply
I know someone whom I believe could make the mistake and who claims to be knowledgeable about wines. Of course that’s not the point, nor is it a metaphor for guys who are dogs. It’s a fantasy of getting even for a deception. The relationship between having a glass of wine with a man and having sex is an add-on, not the main purpose of the poem. Still, the metaphor works in real life, I think, though it’s admittedly not well developed in the poem.
[6] zodiac @ 212.38.134.51 > Dovina | 20-Mar-05/1:31 AM | Reply
Oh. Then it's simply not a very good metaphor, or very useful in this poem. And I still find it hard to believe. But then I'm not Californian. Anyway, sorry :-(
[9] Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199 | 14-Mar-05/4:05 AM | Reply
smut.
[8] poodietat @ 68.51.106.137 | 14-Mar-05/10:33 PM | Reply
Funny, yes. Poetry, afraid not. 8 for the laugh.
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