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Make Music in Your Heart

by Dovina

Member since 2004 · Posted 28 Mar 2005 · Edited 28 Mar 2005 · 21 comments

Stroke your bow upon the strings if in your heart a melody sings and the sound you make will thrill all listening souls Teachers tell you scales to learn and musicianship must be earned but their salaries they protect and you will go in debt So raise a bow and hold a cello think loving thoughts of some fine fellow and the sounds that flow if you have no doubt will wander the room so sweet they’ll call you back to repeat. This is how I learned the piano and how I’ve learned to write now

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21 comments

[9] Dan garcia-Black 28-Mar-05/11:10 AM Reply
"if in your heart a melody sings
and you the one in debt
and part of the reason I write now"
Good thought but the tiniest editing on these lines would help the flow. -9- for now.
[n/a] Dovina › Dan garcia-Black 28-Mar-05/11:19 AM Reply
How’s that? Two for three ain’t bad.
[10] blacksoul 28-Mar-05/4:05 PM Reply
D. luv the flo, keep doin' the dayum thang sugga.
[n/a] Dovina › blacksoul 28-Mar-05/4:50 PM Reply
Glad you like the dayum thang I did. If only I knew what I've done.
[10] jroday › Dovina 29-Mar-05/2:18 AM Reply
D. that's my youngest son he's a music major.
I like the poem.
[9] wilco 28-Mar-05/5:00 PM Reply
Gotta love music.
[n/a] Dovina › wilco 29-Mar-05/7:18 AM Reply
Yep, but love takes work and time.
[10] al-naafiysh 29-Mar-05/2:36 AM Reply
Hello Dovina hope you're doing fine.
I love the poem, because I wanted to be a pro. musician
before I became a math teacher. trying to play the piano was enough for me.
[n/a] Dovina › al-naafiysh 29-Mar-05/7:18 AM Reply
Six weeks of piano lessons were enough to send me back to the sand box.
[3] Stephen Robins 29-Mar-05/3:15 AM Reply
Too much flummery.
[n/a] Dovina › Stephen Robins 29-Mar-05/7:18 AM Reply
Has my silky talk offended your sensibilities? Then you have missed the obvious underlying meaning in lines like “they’ll call you back to repeat.”
[3] Stephen Robins › Dovina 29-Mar-05/11:54 PM Reply
Do you honestly think I still read your poemes before commenting? Dear God! you haven't grasped this at all have you?All your poemes are pervaded by a desperation to be in some way recognised as a genius - you are therefore deserving only of flippant trumps in response.
[n/a] Dovina › Stephen Robins 30-Mar-05/10:31 AM Reply
By not reading them, you make yourself an able commentor.
[10] poodietat 29-Mar-05/8:49 PM Reply
Easily the best poem of yours that I've read. Perhaps I'll visit your archives....
[n/a] edpeterson 29-Mar-05/9:25 PM Reply
I suspect the only music you make is in your billowing bloomers.
[n/a] Dovina › edpeterson 30-Mar-05/10:31 AM Reply
I don't wear bloomers.
[4] Hadasl 5-Apr-05/11:37 PM Reply
The content is great, but the flow is awful. Though there were some mediocre lines, for example:
'This is how I learned the piano
and how I’ve learned to write now'
It sounds like a 5 year old wrote it. And by the way, we are all still learning.
The flow seems very elementary and abecedarian, so please work on that.
As well, learn to accept criticism. Your comments to the reviews, (any comment to reviewing, if not for elucidation, is wrong in my opinion) were extremely puerile. Accept it, and move on. You shouldn't try to fight with people to change their views to ones you agree with. Be mature.
[n/a] Dovina › Hadasl 6-Apr-05/7:55 AM Reply
Seldom does someone comment on one of my poems as you have done here. They usually raise other issues, often having nothing to do with the poem, with which I often argue. You have stated your opinion of the poem, and I accept it.
[n/a] zodiac › Dovina 7-Apr-05/6:16 AM Reply
You just think that because we don't make comments like "How nice it is to make music as a metaphor for writing" just to show how ace we are for getting it.
[n/a] Dovina › zodiac 7-Apr-05/8:19 AM Reply
And I do appreciate your not doing that.
[n/a] zodiac › Dovina 8-Apr-05/5:38 AM Reply
I mean, I understand the need to build people up with some nice comment or a bit showing you get how clever they are, and in real life I do. But I don't think poemranker users care very much what anybody says to them one way or the other, so it's not like it matters. And personally, I don't think making music is a very nice metaphor for writing. Sorry.