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Thinking (Free verse) by dancin_n_da_moonlite Sometimes I wonder
if people ever think anymore,
if people ever think at all.
Or if they just do
whatever
seems
right
at the moment,
regardless of whether or not it actually is.
Sometimes I wonder
if anyone
is
planning for the
future.
It wont take care
of itself,
you know.
Someone must tend to it.
Sometimes I wonder
if
anybody is
thinking.
Up the ladder:
Watching December's Wind
Down the ladder:
sick
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Posted: March 9, 2005 2:15 PM PST; Last modified: January 24, 2006 10:53 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.9525743 Overall Rank: 8888 Comments:
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Dan garcia-Black @ 66.218.59.216
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16-Mar-05/8:22 AM
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You are. Maybe that will be enough. If I were writing this one I would have screwed it up at the end with some trite comment about someone passing the joint or bottle over to me. Good thing you wrote it instead.
Yet another true musing, expressed well.
(5 is average, btw; 8 is between average and super awesome)
I not a fan of poems that reflect a thought directly. I wan't a story. Where's the story?
The cheap comment would be to say that I wonder if you were you thinking when you wrote this poem.
The pretentious comment would be wonder whether the notion of something 'actually' right implies a belief in an objective and unchanging moral system and so the piece is effectively a piece of neo-Kantian thought and so an attack on the relativism of post-structuralist discourse. The kind comment would be to say that it is an interesting idea but really requires further work. The honest would be that this isn't a bad poem as such, it's just rather simplisitc, doesn't really seem to do anything, and leaves me cold. Take your pick. 371 view(s)
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