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To Making Do (Free verse) by Dovina
I gave her my life in little pieces,
of working long and sleeping little,
of wife and lovers come and gone,
humble living and late-night typing.
For this she gave her simple life
at home to work unfettered.
A mid-aged woman who loved just once,
many years ago, no kids to tend.
"I do what I must to stay afloat," I said.
My life has come to getting by.
Where love and music once filled my nights,
I have a room and eat from cans."
"I mix avocation and vocation," she replied.
"Only employment is hard; work is not.
At home with computer alone,
I've chosen to blend my work and play."
"This is a pleasant life you've found," I mused.
"Free from creditors and ex's,
free from ghosts of lovers past,
free to play with lonely time."
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.2
Weighted score: 5.0238404
Overall Rank: 7435
Posted: May 19, 2005 3:57 PM PDT; Last modified: May 19, 2005 3:57 PM PDT
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Not so fond of dialogues in poetry. These segments also lack compositor(i)al harmony. You're one of a few PR's who show a feel for harmony (bâââhh, old-fashioned!) and do more than just sweep together a collection of words that bite each other. Yes I know, it's the temporary way...
I'm not at my very best right now, sorry if I ramble.