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To Making Do (Free verse) by Dovina

I gave her my life in little pieces, of working long and sleeping little, of wife and lovers come and gone, humble living and late-night typing. For this she gave her simple life at home to work unfettered. A mid-aged woman who loved just once, many years ago, no kids to tend. "I do what I must to stay afloat," I said. My life has come to getting by. Where love and music once filled my nights, I have a room and eat from cans." "I mix avocation and vocation," she replied. "Only employment is hard; work is not. At home with computer alone, I've chosen to blend my work and play." "This is a pleasant life you've found," I mused. "Free from creditors and ex's, free from ghosts of lovers past, free to play with lonely time."

Alizarin_Crimson 20-May-05/12:28 PM
Great, except I don't think you need the "I said" in the frist line of the 3rd stanza. Its pretty self-explanitory.




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