Re: Oops by John Rambo	24-Mar-07/4:51 AM
I love the word "sac".
Re: Settling In by jessicazee	24-Mar-07/4:49 AM
You rule.
Re: Reincarnation by Dovina	10-Mar-07/3:13 AM
I love "tiniest bugs", then it looks like long division, until "Nero", then a sudoku (sp?) puzzle, then the best line I've seen lately: "in poet, leaf, or dog__", yay and yay. 9
Re: The Laws of Life by lrustagi	1-Mar-07/3:04 AM
Courageous (sp?) and well-tought-out. 8.9
Re: a comment on Remembering Nick by jessicazee	1-Mar-07/2:54 AM
thank you for finally saying that. I totally have to change it to "Remebering My Doctor". P.S. What about Nick Rhodes from Duran Duran?
Re: Captured by Dovina	15-Feb-07/6:25 AM
2nd stanza made me all nicey-nice. Also, what is a "trainer's chair?"
Re: Lucky by suejonespoetry	14-Oct-05/1:07 AM
One more thing after reading this again --- you are a great writer, and I mean that because I heard you say this out loud; if not here in my room, but the way you say your words without backpedaling. Yeah.
Re: Lucky by suejonespoetry	14-Oct-05/1:04 AM
Omit the 1st 3 stanzas, they don't matter for for real writing out loud; after that, very good --- keep expressing that tough, genuine voice. Don't let your wallflower alter-ego write prefacing disclaimers for your really right-on, deadpan visions that speak for themselves. good job. 8.6
Re: Creatures That Crawl To Me by D P Robertson	14-Oct-05/12:52 AM
Seriously? And your name at the end? Wo. Seek help. Hee. Redeeming qualities: the line "choking in kelp" is totally excellent, as is "gather your ghosts on liquid graves". Not good ideas: repeating the word "creatures" ad nauseam (weird, but not in a good way?) and forced-feeling line breaks throughout, especially in the last stanza, which is actually focused, but over-importantly broken up for no good reason. Edit please, but still a good 7.8 for effort. Read it 3 times in fact.
Re: a comment on My First Boyfriend by jessicazee	9-Oct-05/8:24 PM
zodiac- shut UP. thanks so much, really, b'cause I think yr stuff is , like, stick-in-my-heady and good too. Ew, like, let's have a poemy stroke session, yuh, hee. But I do post on this site for critique, so feel free. I'll do the same.
Re: 8/29 by cronus	31-Aug-05/12:10 AM
You need a more painful title. 9
Re: Song of the cannonball ( a drinking song) by INTRANSIT	30-Aug-05/10:11 PM
I'll kis YOU with a powder burn! What a great line. You had me at "drinking song".
Re: Summer Song by wilco	30-Aug-05/10:10 PM
oops - i mispelled "apostrophe" - it still looks wrong?
Re: Summer Song by wilco	30-Aug-05/10:09 PM
A few suggestions: put the apostrohe before the s in "summers'"; say more about the girl - what does she look like?; use the word "linger" only once, twice makes me not listen. What I love: "All of the cars, black as they pass by your house"; "Satellites ride across the heavens like stars". 8.7
Re: a comment on Waiting Room by jessicazee	14-Aug-05/1:19 AM
Wha?
Re: a comment on Waiting Room by jessicazee	11-Aug-05/6:51 PM
What a nice thing to say. Thanks so much! I needed that today, and I may even be motivated to finally get all my shit together & make a little book. Thank you!
Re: a comment on Suicide by jessicazee	31-Jul-05/5:38 PM
Ain't you sweet, like a 2-liter of Sun Country wine cooler. Thanks.
Re: Showtime by INTRANSIT	28-Jul-05/1:41 AM
You totally should have stayed up. Don't capitalize "cicadas." Also, I love this. 9.8
Re: a comment on My Golden Birthday by jessicazee	28-Jul-05/1:17 AM
Stephen - Is a "nappy" a diaper for Brits? Not sure if you're tossing a riddled compliment or telling me you're disappointed? Others -- thanks for the nice feedback.
Re: A Good Man Ruined by Dovina	20-Jul-05/7:46 PM
tell me why buildable is awesome in the beginning and I will begin to care. I think you have a grand character sketch here if you give it another go.