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Free verse № 131693

My First Boyfriend

by jessicazee

Member since 2002 · Posted 6 Oct 2005 · 3 comments

I drove your Datsun, my couch an ell, subterranean blue eyed Stockbridge-Munsee tribe in Converse and balding socks you lived upstairs from China Palace your waterbed sucked me in at Quarters you played good flute while rain poured in on drumsets and I clapped so hard I yelled your name I said I love your songs your hat and shoes

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[7] Dovina 6-Oct-05/4:30 PM Reply
From "your waterbed sucked me in" on it's good.
[10] zodiac 8-Oct-05/3:56 AM Reply
Brilliant. Always a pleasure. I have no idea how to critique or edit your poems. Brilliant.
[n/a] jessicazee › zodiac 9-Oct-05/8:24 PM Reply
zodiac- shut UP. thanks so much, really, b'cause I think yr stuff is , like, stick-in-my-heady and good too. Ew, like, let's have a poemy stroke session, yuh, hee. But I do post on this site for critique, so feel free. I'll do the same.