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My First Boyfriend (Free verse) by jessicazee

I drove your Datsun, my couch an ell, subterranean blue eyed Stockbridge-Munsee tribe in Converse and balding socks you lived upstairs from China Palace your waterbed sucked me in at Quarters you played good flute while rain poured in on drumsets and I clapped so hard I yelled your name I said I love your songs your hat and shoes

zodiac 8-Oct-05/3:56 AM
Brilliant. Always a pleasure. I have no idea how to critique or edit your poems. Brilliant.




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