Re: Taller Girl by lastobelus	20-Mar-03/12:05 PM
this would be my edit: taller girl whirled her skirt in segregated circles drawing boundaries all around her with it, while her hair lashed out in little black laraits and, her long arms aloft, that skirt floated up towards them, wooshing out and drawing her space unusually wide, as she was unusually tall as if she could eclipse herself in it one drum and one guitar and then another and under her circling hair, her face comes, cover comes under that silken black and once more coming ?round with her hair flying up I saw furled brows and closed, black-lined eyes and a mouth turned down in studied oblivion; but another coming around had an opened eye and red upturned lips under the flying glimpse of hair, so that I saw that she saw that I saw her, and then she whirled away into the center until I saw only the fringe of her hair flying over the heads of all the others, and my moment, crushed under her stamping boots
Re: Knights of progress 'alter boy shamed' by Bachus	8-Oct-02/10:52 PM
your poems are often so convoluted that i can't decide if they are genius or chum. they make the ganglia twitch, itch, bitch. ditch me. lick me.
Re: Essential Love by unknown	8-Oct-02/10:46 PM
when i read this, i feel putrid all over. what treacly tripe.
Re: Punishment and Punishment again by vulcan	26-Sep-02/12:10 AM
Why do you punctuate like that?
Re: The Drive In (Drugs broke her, she broke me) by <{Baba^Yaga}>	26-Sep-02/12:08 AM
This poem makes me want to go out and buy a 40-Oz. Make that 2. Works every time.
Re: Morning conflict by INTRANSIT	26-Sep-02/12:04 AM
20 oz. ought to do it nicely. Nicely done.
Re: calendared by cobalt	26-Sep-02/12:03 AM
Good sounds here, but meter is uneven.
Re: Since The Fall by harrytuttle	26-Sep-02/12:01 AM
My goldfish grew an inch.
Re: Taffy by knickytoy	25-Sep-02/11:58 PM
Sticky. Good, because it's not been pulled too far.
Re: myself by decadentlaurel	25-Sep-02/11:54 PM
Unfinished sentences; missing punctuation and capitalisation; the bubonic plague?
Re: glory bar realities by royalflesh	25-Sep-02/11:52 PM
Prankster or no, he's a fascinating protagonist, in this story too. When do the others get to speak?
Re: Noblesse Oblige by Christof	25-Sep-02/11:50 PM
Silly bird. Smart poem.
Re: The Nights Draw In by Nicholas Jones	25-Sep-02/11:48 PM
Great. Really great evocation.
Re: a comment on The Writing Life #2 by poetandknowit	25-Sep-02/11:38 PM
You're going to send him that $30 anyways, aren't you?
Re: a comment on The Writing Life #2 by poetandknowit	25-Sep-02/11:28 PM
I think she's calling you fat!
Re: WHY by adrenalize	25-Sep-02/10:53 PM
Because you'd rather cling to something imagined than move on and make a future? Really people. Is this the bleeding hearts club?
Re: making progress (a piece of it) by Limness	25-Sep-02/10:51 PM
So what? Get over it.
Re: O Man Away From Me by Limness	25-Sep-02/10:50 PM
Indeed. But flesh makes a warmer one, as we both must know.
Re: 5 p.m. by cobalt	25-Sep-02/10:46 PM
If you would take the train, you'd avoid this mess. But then, would we have this poem?
Re: Velvetted by knickytoy	25-Sep-02/10:44 PM
He'll not be horny again dear.