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Since The Fall (Ode) by harrytuttle I'm wond'ring now
A year's gone by
Could it have been so long ago?
It seems like only yesterday
I'm hunkered down
I'm looking up
The danger looms like thunderheads
What lies ahead?
Everything's changed
And everything is still the same
Are we united one to one?
We tread on thin ice everyday
But still go bowling, still play golf
Nothing is changed
Everything's changed
Up the ladder:
Deadly Rape
Down the ladder:
Disregardance
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Posted: September 24, 2002 6:45 AM PDT; Last modified: September 24, 2002 6:45 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.4255967 Overall Rank: 12941 Comments:
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vulcan @ 80.242.3.216
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24-Sep-02/8:21 AM
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I like it 7.
L12 & 13 could be a poem on there own, Good. the last 2 lines are over used. I think the poem would do better without them.
Actually, the redundance is deliberate. I looked at it without them and it isn't the same poem (to me).
Business relationship gone sour? Cool though.7
My goldfish grew an inch.
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