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Deadly Rape (Haiku) by HolyKnightOfFaith Little boy runs quick.
A Large man chases quicker,
Boy found in gutter.
Up the ladder:
contradiction and contrast
Down the ladder:
Since The Fall
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Posted: May 18, 2002 10:15 PM PDT; Last modified: May 20, 2002 1:21 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.4255967 Overall Rank: 12940 Comments:
perhaps "faster" instead of "fast".
This lacks subtlety -- perhaps the hardness was intended to play off the haiku form, but it doesn't quite work for me.
any suggestions?
AWWW YEAH
yeah, I like the way you've thwarted the reader's expectations by taking a traditionally subtle and suggestive form and producing a blunt, harsh image.
there are two people who have this poem.. or r u just two people?
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17 syllables, and its like a small movie, not a reflection.. not turning in itself on the image....